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My end product to the HILARIOUS Challenge - finally - my title "Forever and never, beyond my words" - I had to think a bit before the poem "came" - hope I did it some justice. View table of contents...
Submitted: Jun 15, 2008 Reads: 71 Comments: 18 Likes: 13
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I think this is superb. I really do love it. I know it strikes a chord with me but the structure of the piece is so effortlessly carried out by a very deft pen.I also wonder what people glean about me from my writing and whether I am right about what I get from others.
Posted: Jun 15, 2008
Oh, I could talk about this subject all day. I always wonder what people make of me from my writing! Lol! Now, I'm wondering about you too? :) I love the way this ended and you're right, we can never be sure about a person online, but we can never be sure about a person in real life either. I've known somebody for more than 20 years and they've recently changed a lot on me. Or so it seems. Great Poem Anna! It alwasy seems so effortless for you.
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
Oh so very nice, Anna!!! A beautiful flow to it. I have been working on a piece for the last couple of days with a similar theme. It's about believing in what someone actually does rather than in what they say. I may never finish it now after reading your wonderful poem!! Perhaps I'll change it to an essay or article!! Who knows... LOL!!!
Forever and never... NO! Forever and 'ALWAYS'.....Jerry
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
Very good one ! I now see a lot after read your poem.
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
Change is inevitable. Personalities change as we grow along with life, our perspectives change. Sometimes we think others change, but we do too. My style in writing for the past 15 years or so has changed so much! Back when I first started to write, it had such a sweet and innocent tone. Then, by the time I was 15, I was angry at the world, and so it was the tone in most of my poetry. Now, that I'm in my 30s, again perspective of life has changed, and so has my words.
Anyway, Anna, a very thought-provoking poem. Very well done. Hiralarious should love it!! I know I do.
MA
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
Wow, I love this poem. It flows so smoothly and, as MA said, it's very thought-provoking. Hiralarious should really like it. Please let me know when you have a new poem up. :)
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
Fantastic poem! You definitely did the line justice. Yes, I definitely felt the breathing soul beyond your words :) Wow, I never knew that the text in parentheses could be so effective in delivering emotions.
One pet-peeve of mine is that I really dislike exclamation marks in poetry haha, it is really a matter of opinion but to me it always seems like an exclamation mark is trying to make the reader feel something that isn't there.
This was a great poem! :D Keep up the good work.
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
WOW!!! ANNA, this is AMAZING! extraordinair*******
Yes, I think we do see through a persons writing but just how much tends to each person separate knowing.
Anna truly this is a fabulous speaking poem! Thankyou, thankyou and oh of course THANKYOU HILARIOUS!! Anna it is a pleasure to get to know you better ^_^ wishes and peacefulness to you ~katie
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
WOW - that's really all I can manage to say right now. You have me speechless. This was marvelous Anna!!!! I seriously think this is my favorite of yours!
Absolutely positively beautiful :)
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
I can't stop reading it and it just SOARED into my favourite list of poetry. I fell a little in love with it!!
Divine.
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
DEAR ANNA, PLEASE FEEL THIS JUMBO SIZE HUG....
...NOW....
I honestly hate when people change for their selfishness and A CHANGE WHICH MAKES SOMEONE A BETTER PERSON is always always WELCOME....well i hope it made sense...
GEEZ, i am getting carried away from the main theme....
I am so happy that I can relate to so many of you in BOOKSIE though we have and probably would never meet in person
BUT BUT...BUT...
I PRAY TO ALMIGHTY TO KEEP OUR FRIENDSHIP INTACT TILL I AM ALIVE....
here i go again.....
Posted: Jun 17, 2008
Hey Anna, I was trying to figure out which my favourite lines in this poem are. Then I realized that it is impossible to pick any, since all of them are so good! I absolutely LOVED this poem. I especially like the way the poem flowed in a gentle way, meandering along the coasts of past, and then suddenly it plunged into the valley of doubt, but smoothed over to flow again as a gentle river. Amazing!
Posted: Jun 18, 2008
Anna you are an amazing writer and have a way with words. They express your feelings which you share so well.
Posted: Jun 19, 2008
I think it's so easy to read more into things than there really is, it can lead to assumptions, and trouble. Me, I'm nosey! lol I can't help but analyse words, and i often do it without realising. I can only imagine what people make of me... but that's the thrill of being a writer I guess? Ha!
I loved this Anna, sparked a little curiosity in me. :) ~ Nixie
Posted: Jun 19, 2008
Brillaint job! Sorry it took so long to read, but I'm really glad I did read this (:
Posted: Jun 20, 2008
Just reading again.
Still loving it!
Posted: Jun 22, 2008
Wow this reminds me so much of Pablo Neruda, these lines especially:
You may see the breathing soul when I write with truth?
without inhibition, naked, flung to you from my depths
but beware
sometimes I lie!
the words come from somewhere
other than my heart
I pluck them mercilessly from imagination’s endless realms
paint them lighter, brighter, darker, deeper
than my reality
i know this is not a love poem but these lines remind me of Neruda's love poems.
I love your structure and the emphasis on truth, words, feelings, there something of love and trust in there. Stunning work which i will read over and over
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
Wow! Another great poem...beautiful!
You just never know about someone truly. Very true, how you never really know a person. You might have known them for years, and one day boom!! A big blow of what you thought you knew, to what you thought you would never see or know. If that made sense...lol!!
Funny how you think you know someone, they give commitments, loyalty, and over time? It was all a lie!!
Well written!
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
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