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This was also written a while back, (and I apologise for submitting "old" work but some of it I am very proud of or enarmoured with) was published in Australia with a good review. It began as a descriptive poem after a savage but spectacular frost and developed into a poem about life and how a mother can only watch her children throughout their lives sometimes "learn the hard way" no matter how painful this is to her. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Feb 16, 2008    Reads: 92    Comments: 14    Likes: 10   


We walk
my son and I
on diamond glittering footpaths
gasp with cold and delight
this frosty winter’s morning
 
Precarious sheen of precious jewels
Wandering white,
            bright
            light
accentuating perfect forms –
fragile fronds
pearl encrusted pebbles
lonely leaves
from a forgotten season
 
Frozen puddles crunch under feet
His excited squeals
            pierce
the peculiar early morning hush –
iced cars loom
like silent misshapen ghosts
            and
white rooved houses
            nestle
deceptively calm
occasional puffs of smoke
            creeping
from iceblock chimneys
 
We walk,
up and down hills
he,
with crisp
and youthful enthusiasm
I,
with frost-bitten
time-learned wariness
slippery slide of
            discovery
            adventure
            and treacherous conditions
 
He rushes,
headlong and headstrong
I cannot prepare him
only watch
as he tumbles
his pained surprise
at the iciness
            the frosted edge
of something
so beautiful.
 
           
 


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Comments:

FROST is so amazing
You really are a great writer

Keep Writing

-Krystina

Posted: Feb 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Krystina - not so amazing but heartfelt. Like with your own poetry heartfelt shines through.

Irwin
(not registered user)

Excellent poem, well constructed and words thoughtfully
chosen. Winters like I remember them - magic!

Posted: Feb 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Irwin that is a beautiful comment. There is so much dark, dismal and complicated writing these days it is good to try and create some "magic". Thank you!

What an amazing poem, full of imagery. I was a handful as a child, and now that I'm a mom, I can relate to both sides!
MA

Posted: Feb 17, 2008

Author Comment:

I am glad you enjoyed the poem. I can relate to both sides as well - my father told me once on "Bonfire" or Guy Fawkes night never to handle a sparkler after the sparks had died down. So of course I just had to find out why not! (Ouch!)

Very enjoyable read Anna, this is a precious one indeed* katie :)

Posted: Feb 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Katie thank you, I can still remember the day but by writng about it it is now permanently etched.

Really great discriptive Poem loved it......Til Later Juliet

Posted: Feb 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Again, thank you so much. I enjoyed writing it although sometimes I fear the words don't quite do the "magnificence" and "atmosphere" true justice (not like a painting where it hits you in the eye)

a very lovely piece, Anna. I never had children so I can only imagine how difficult to stand by and watch the error of their ways. Beautifully rendered.....Jerry

Posted: Feb 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you again for another very gracious and kind comment. I am glad you enjoyed it.

A really great piece!

Posted: Feb 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for kind comment. I am glad it is enjoyable for others to read.

Your imagery is so beautifully crisp - i've just had to go and turn the heating up! Lovely stuff.

Posted: Mar 4, 2008

Author Comment:

October O I can still picture the day that inspired this peom - a frost so incedibly widespread and breathtaking just had to be written about! Thanks for comment

this one brought me closer to my son's point of view....
so surreal...i loved this one so much....

Posted: May 21, 2008

Author Comment:

This one is a fovourite of mine. Thanks! I have just posted what I think is a very sweet romantic story. Hope you find the time to read it some time.

Hi ANNA, i came back again sweetheart....This one is my Favorite....

Posted: May 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Well I'm glad you came back!! This is one of my very favourites too! (I can still picture the day that inspired it walking with my youngest son to his school) It was published in Australia and the editor said it offered many layers of meaning.

This poem screams Mom. I love it. It has a simple beauty and speaks to the mothers who watch over us all thrugh our lives. The way they fret and yet have the courage to let go as we explore the wide world.

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Tarot you read this well - a Mum writing who tries to do all the things you describe.

I love your poem. I can relate because my youngest son looks at me more as a grandmother than as a mother. His friends at school have young mothers and I walk with a limp and have to be careful of falling. He told me once that when he is with me he feels like I am his grandmother and I replied "Well if it makes you feel any better we can pretend that I am."

Posted: Jun 12, 2008

Author Comment:

I will respond to this one (your other kind comments awaiting - maybe tomorrow) because I can appreciate your youngest sons dilemma - I had my youngest son when I was thirty-seven so he literally did have an "older" Mum. He has never thought anything of it however. Thanks for reading.

yes, FROST is amazing. it makes me think though of a fantasy world where two fairies wander through the bejeweled countryside. still is totally awesome.

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much for lovely comment on one of my favourite poems.

"Frost" is exquisite! You describe the wonders of a wintry morn so well... I also liked the underlying meaning of the poem too. From the standpoint of a minor still living with her parents, I am in complete agreement that oftentimes a child must learn the hard way.

This was a delight to read!

By the way--are you Australian?

Posted: Sep 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Fan Fan, yes I'm an Ozzie through and through though may parents came from Britain. I love your comment to this poem and I love it when readers take the time to read not so recently published works. Thank you.



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