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A fun experimental poem. Booksie hasn't replicated the exact formation (ie. all the first stanza should be in a square box shape! but you may appreciate what I tried to do with this?)
My small way of saying thank you to Tarot.
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Submitted: Jul 5, 2008 Reads: 68 Comments: 16 Likes: 8
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And the last stanza was middle aligned with the escape word scampering away recklessly not conservatively as booksie would have it!!!
Posted: Jul 5, 2008
Nice, keep thinking outside the box, Anna Therese. Isn't it fun creating something different. I tried a challenge and got a (memoriam stanza, quatrain in iambic tetrameter with a ryhming scheme.) I had to look all that up, before I could even start. But I did it, it was hard, but fun. Check it out if you can.(Faith=Paradise) Ted.
Posted: Jul 5, 2008
YA!!! ESCAPE!!!
Anyone, woohooo! i'm glad you're going there.
Woohooo!
Anyways, I really enjoyed this poem because I totally agree with you, stretching to where others' haven't been and writing outside of what is to be expected of poetry right now. I loved the poem too. ESCAPE!!!
:D I write experimental poems from time to time and none of them really turn out too well but I still like to experiment and hopefully sharpen some skills to use in latter poems. When someone writes something like you just did it really helps the writer even if the poem doesn't turn out great...
but yours did!
:D
Posted: Jul 5, 2008
Gosh, this went above my head....but i loved the pattern....it is so different...
hiya ANNA, i cannot leave message on ur profile page ...something is wrong...
Posted: Jul 5, 2008
hi! anna. a little unusual pattern at first but the message comes out strong and clear. when u r different, it makes u stand apart.
by the way, did tarot read this out of box booksie experiment and realise what a great admirer he has in you.
this one is amazing. lol. ;-)
Posted: Jul 9, 2008
Hmmm, I think even though booksie messed up the formatting, it looks really cool and really works well with overall tone and mood of the poem. Bravo.
Posted: Jul 9, 2008
I like it.........
Sometimes a poem works better if you move away from the standard format of the box
Peace
Boneman
Posted: Jul 10, 2008
Smarty pants.
Love it.
Posted: Jul 10, 2008
ah, what a pleasure to have such friend, he has to read this so he can know what a treasure he is :)
that's great Anna to have this influence in your writing skills, how wonderful! :)
~katie
Posted: Jul 11, 2008
hi Anna, I love this poem. It’s interesting to see what can inspire people to write and write differently. I think its human nature to have our securities and that includes poetry. follow a safe and trusted path so to speak, but I love experimental poems. I came across some ages back when I first read Dylan Thomas and his Vision and Prayer poems, I also enjoy reading different stuff I come across on booksie. I think some of these challenges have made people look at poetry in a different light, if more in content than structure. My own poems are pretty predictable but I’ve recently gone back to attempt to write in rhyming couplets as well as free verse. Some people feel this kind of poetry is somewhat restrictive, which I also thought, but when you get flowing its surprising how quickly the words come. I think sometimes people forget that poetry is art, and the artist experiments with technique, especially as they are confronted with new ideas. I also see art and poetry as expressing cultural origins and influences. Through “bookise’s world domination” I’d like to read more poems expressing this premise, but all too often people are drawn to the safe standard way of writing. I think a good challenge for this site would be one which puts emphasis on structure as well as content.
Anyway, sorry for the long comment. It is sure to say Anna your poem and poems inspire me, thank you for sharing!
Posted: Jul 13, 2008
never having studied the remotest thing about tarot , i looked in , you have given me food for thought , thanks for that , i love a challenge.
Posted: Jul 14, 2008
This poem reminded me a bit of e e cummings. It is wild and uninhibited. I felt a little bit of the escape that you felt when writing it. I think its lovely to make poetry your own and this style is great for you, I believe.
Posted: Jul 14, 2008
I'm glad to see your experimentation. I especially like the arrangement of "winds". I can almost hear the snap of a flag wafting to and fro. The torch is passed, dear lady. Run with it. :)
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
No new work planned in the near future. Life is interfering at the moment. A family member had a heart attack and I'm managing their business while the recover. Once my family member stabilizes, I have a transcontinental move to arrange. Hence, why it took me two weeks before I was able to view this grand work. Rest assured I will pop in from time to time. Take care.
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
And so I've returned to this poem of yours.
Almost like you are trying to reveal an inner struggle to freedom. Perhaps that worm you left on my page the other day. eh?
The confidence to do, just this, is what builds your personality. Ha, like I could ever tell a woman of your stature anything! ha ha...there is still a bit of control in this one though... which is exactly who you are!
Love it.
Posted: Jul 27, 2008
Queen of Cups? I loved your experiment and found it liberating. Your words always stay with me.
Posted: Aug 20, 2008
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