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Poem By: Avril360
Poetry


Tags: sad, love, sharing, times

finding out the words i need to know.... View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Apr 28, 2008    Reads: 75    Comments: 10    Likes: 5   


Looking, Looking

I stay staring at the phone waiting for you to call

Waiting, Waiting

I am waiting for the rain to fall

Falling, Falling

I feel like I am falling in a vortex of all my past

Waiting, Waiting

I'm waiting for your big shadow to be cast

Finding everything i wanted

Looking for every single moment

We spent together, man all those times

I wish I could go back, and make them all to rhymes

Rhymes of freedom everywhere i go

Rhymes of freedom to and fro

I wanted you all my life so bad

i can't see you anymore from what we had

I'll show forever more if i just got you to come back man, i am so sad


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poewhit
poewhit

That state of love waiting

Posted: Apr 29, 2008

Author Comment:

what???? what is that supposed to mean?!

Pratibha
Pratibha

Amazing...sweetheart...
yes, LOVE is powerful and sweet and divine and serene and peaceful and everything ....I liked it

Posted: May 2, 2008

Author Comment:

thanxx! Read more of my writing!

sykkeloblat

Lovely lyrical prose!
I've done some waiting myself, so I know that feeling.

Posted: May 3, 2008

Author Comment:

thanxx 4 da commnet!!!!! i'll be sure to check out and comment on your writing if you check out and comment on my other writing too!

Josee
Josee

aww, so sad, but such a great poem! Keep it up!
-Josee-

Posted: May 13, 2008

Author Comment:

thanxx!

Casey Bell
Casey_Bell

great job
sounds like something you would hear on the radio

Posted: May 15, 2008

Author Comment:

thanxxx!!

seesawmae

wow, this is really really good!

Posted: May 19, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you so much seesawmae

BrookeSimon

Really well done =]
-Brooke

Posted: May 21, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you soooo much

forgottenletters

I like the structure at the beginning with the repeated words. I liked it. (:

Posted: May 31, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you soooo much

bubbly
bubbly

hi! avril. wow. waiting can be despairing. hoping u meet him. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

thaxx!!

kimberleymacnee
kimberleymacnee

Oh i like it!

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you soo much!! it means a lot!



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