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"Black Hole"

Poem By: Azmat Shah
Poetry


I wrote this poem for a very special fan and friend as a thank you for all her unwavering support and kindness. Susan this one is for you. You really liked "Autumn Day" so i wrote this poem for you about the black hole. Since you like metaphors and symbolism i decided to give you something similar to "Autumn Day" I hope you like it.
I JUST WANT ALL MY READERS TO KNOW THAT THE BLACK HOLE IS NOT A REFLECTION ON SUSAN AS A PERSON. THIS IS ONE OF MY FAVORITE POEMS AND I WANTED TO DEDICATE IT TO SOMEONE WHO MEANS A LOT TO ME. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 11, 2008    Reads: 84    Comments: 14    Likes: 10   


A million  miles a thousand stars,

an endless void, barren and sparse,

beyond the Sun the bleakness gapes,

for life it bleeds, for light it waits.

And far away a shooting star,

rips through the sky a burning scar,

a distant comet forlorn and lost,

watches on as time unfolds.

If one but travels beyond the skies,

and pierces through the darkest nights,

the edge of time awaits such a fool,

for gnawing silence here doth rule.

This edge of time is where it lies,

Alone, unwanted in anguish it cries,

lustilly grabbing at anything within its reach,

trying to feed off life just  like a leech.

But nothing assuages its hunger and thirst,

its doomed for an eternity, it is but cursed,

it's lived for eons without a mate,

it has been trapped on one side of an open gate.

Edging forward in hopeless disarray,

searching anxiously it shifts and sways,

towards those distant stars it strays,

for it has found a place to stay.

As it nears those distant stars,

it shrieks with joy, unbridled, unscarred,

but all it recieves in unjust reward,

is fear, abuse and curses galore.

Still it enters their twinkling shoal,

they shriek with fright  "BLACK HOLE! BLACK HOLE!"

in its jubilation it has gone deaf,

it does not hear their cries of death.


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Comments:

You're so sweet, Azmat, for writing me a poem. If you were near I'd give you a big Jesus hug. Too bad you are far away in Pakistan? Oh well, I'll send the hug through to you in a special prayer just for you.

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanlyou so much for that special prayer you sent just to me lol. I am so happy you liked the poem.

WHat is your impairment?
Inaudible?

There is an impairment here.
Beautiful poem. I'll wait to decipher as I'm cut for time right now.

Simply beautiful Azmat.

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

hello Peachy,
what makes you think i have an impairment. I know my poems are pretty morbid but then i write them instinctively. Believe me i wasnt in a sad frame of mind when i wrote this one to tell you the truth i wrote this one thinking about the black hole after watching a star wars episode(Blushes).

I feel like your poems are always speaking but you feel no one is hearing. or.... i don't know. I told ya i was emotionally overloaded, got carried away with your poetry....heehee.

You are a bright girl. Maybe a tad morbid, but that makes you interesting. ha!

have a very wonderful afternoon!

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Hello,
i guess i am a tad morbid, well there has to be a nelly nitpicker someplace lol, atleast i am different(That by the way is how i console myself lol). Thankyou so much peachy for reading this and commenting, but i am a little dissapointed you didnt try to decipher this one.
P.S in my real life no one really listens to what i have to write i guess i am the prisoner of cultural and social taboos, so you are right in that way, maybe my poem does reflect that. You have given me a lot to think about.

hi! azmat. et tu azmat! susan has a way of making place in our hearts. no comment of mine will do it any justice, for it should remain as it is. ;-)

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

This poem carried me far away to black night skies and twinkling stars. It really has a quality to transcend one from the mundane. I like that you dedicated it to your friend Susan. Thoughtful, poignant, evocative, beautiful and "I like it"

Posted: Jun 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much for ur lovely comment. WOW you just made my day! i am truly grateful that you found the time to comment. I hope you like the rest of my poems too.

A Beautiful poem...your sentence "This edge of time is where it lies, "Alone, unwanted in anguish it cries,".....

I stopped and had to look at that, deep in thought....well, this poem spoke to me in a different way then perhaps others.......

Beautiful!

Posted: Jun 12, 2008

Let no cultural barrier stop ur flight....

SUSAN IS A SWEETHEART.....AND SHE DESERVES EVERY HAPPINESS IN THIS UNIVERSE.....GOD BLESS HER ALWAYS AND ALSO YOU DEAR....

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank Pratibha, and may God Bless You Too lol.

Beautiful poem! Really. I loved this one also. I am definetely giving it an 'I liked it vote'. :)

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thankyou for ur comment and encouragement.

I really wish I could pick out the symbolism in this... I really wish I could write a longer comment for this one.
But honestly - here I am once again speechless.
I love your poetry. I wish I could go in-depth with this one as I did with your poem about hope. But you have blown me away.
You are a wonderful writer ^^
This poem was outstanding :)

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Author Comment:

WOW thank you so much, ur lovely comment just blew me away LOL. To have someone as exceptional as you praise my work means so much to me. I am so happy you liked this poem. The symbolism in this one is basically about loneliness and people who are so alone and bitter that when they do tend to find some companionship they drown it with their need for meaning. Its basically my way of saying that loneliness and the quest to find someone who can understand you is basically like a disease, it may be subdued for some time, its effects may diminish temporarily but it can never truly be cured. That is what the Black Hole portrays, for even as it craves friends it ends up swamping them with its possesive, destructive need.

Very moving ^^
I liked it.

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, i am glad you liked it.

I came back to this work of art. I say art because it is exquisite and you are so special and noteworthy. Your poetry is remarkable as you are. Keep writing, don't stop. Don't let culture stand in your way. You have a lot to say so I encourage you, dear one, to say on and never stop.

Posted: Jul 3, 2008

Very nice. Nicely personified. Like an exiled god, it tries quench an unquenchable thirst. Tragic and beautiful.

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Hello Azmat...you have God's gift.
Rahbar.

Posted: Jul 31, 2008

this is so sensational, the rhyming and everything.. i feel like this is the best poem ive read on booksie! im going to read your other stuff now!!

Posted: Jul 31, 2008



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