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"CHANGE"

Poem By: Azmat Shah
Poetry


This is one of my earliest poems in fact it is actually my third. I think the poem is pretty self explanatory. Would you believe i was inspired to write this one after watching a scene in Disney's "Pocohontas", I know that is lame but i still love Disney cartoons and not the CGI graphics crap they come up with now a days.
I mean i can appreciate special effects and they do have a momentary glamor but its the old classics that really have the power to inspire. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 1, 2008    Reads: 81    Comments: 10    Likes: 8   


Change is like a tiny ripple,

Upon the surface it lies, just like a cripple,

And on this vast expanse of time,

It searches for its role sublime,

Alas it seems to be too weak,

And to the world it looks timid and meek,

But look that ripple oh so small,

Has spread a small distance on its own.

 

As this ripple dies and ebbs,

It plants another in its stead,

But look this time it is not one,

The surface is broken by two at once.

 

And hence they spread and grow and thrive,

Until the smooth surface swarms, like a ripple hive,

This time the ripples do not look weak,

They storm, they shout, they howl, they shriek,

Their war cry pierces the darkest shroud,

Their chant reverberates against the clouds.

 

Within no time a silent breeze arrives,

It seems to whisper to the hive,

As moonlight breaks the moonless night.

 

The tempestuous breeze cannot be allayed,

It turns the ripples into towering waves,

These mighty waves so supple and strong,

Are generals who control the swarm,

They rally their forces behind the raging wind,

For they are the instigators of glorious change,

And one can only stare in reverent awe,

As they forge ahead and resistance thaws.

 

But when one ventures through the triumphant ranks,

And heads to the centre from the banks,

One is but shocked to see the mighty waves,

Bow to the ripples along the way.

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Comments:

I was too busy smoking and drinking when I was 16 to dare even write nor comprehend what you just wrote.

Good news is, I am all grown up now. (you said you were 16 when you wrote this right??)

I could totally imagine Pocha tenderly tapping the surface of the water with her porcelin finger tip and watching all the effects that it makes. Almost, never ending.

I sometimes feel when I read your writing that you are shaking your fist into the air. Maybe it's the meter that you capture. Do you?

:)

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you once again Peachy. And yeah i was sixteen when i wrote this LOL. Pocahontas was just so romantic, it really fired my imagination. It's a shame they don't make movies like that anymore. No wonder kids today are into so much crap LOL.

Azmat, I enjoyed your poem. I thought your imagery was great. While reading it I could see a beautiful moonlight shining down on that tiny ripple as it opens and unfolds on the surface of the water.

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

I could see this movie comletely with your writing. A great poem and well written.

I love these lines......

"And to the world it looks timid and meek,

But look that ripple oh so small,

Has spread a small distance on its own."


Such a lovely poem! Like Peachy....I could see Pocha through it all. I really enjoyed reading this....

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

The poem was terrific and I enjoyed it immensely. It truly blessed my day. I needed a little spark to get me going today. Thank you, Your fan and friend, Susan

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

A triumphant sort of poem, moves along like a powerful shout. I really enjoyed it.

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, i am so glad you liked it.

I loved this one ans esp because this is associated with old cartoons...i also don't like the recent ones...themeless...and the last line in this poem is my fav....

I feel like that tiny ripple in this huge ocean....

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

I would have dropped everything and rushed into the arms of literature had I been able to write so well when I was sixteen. It is beautiful in many ways: the imagery itself is awesome; the tone is just right; the theme is amazing. You have managed to build the tempo with just the right pace, going slow when the ripple is forming, and marching fast when the waves take life. And what a neat little ending which takes us back to the very beginning, like the circle of time! Beautiful!

I loved the term 'ripple hive' and the way you have used personification to describe the behaviour of the waves in that paragraph. My favourite stanza! I also like the way 'as moonlight breaks the moonless night' sounds.

Posted: Jul 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, Thank you, thank you! you have just made my day. You really are a sly fox, you caught the thing at the end just like a pro LOL. I meant this poem to be inspirational. To tell you the truth i can only write poems on a few themes, they are either sad or they are motivational. Sometimes i write them as fiction as you saw in Satan's plan, Toymaster etc. I really wish to write something romantic for one.

^_^ yes, all that Urja just said lol!
well I was going to say that it in similar terms such as it brought me to this wonderful peak and then back again but I think Urja said it much, much better :)

yes 16 years old, that's amazing!
thanks Amzat, I really need to read more of your work.
I hope you have a nice fourth of July
~katie

Posted: Jul 4, 2008

Wow . . . just . . . wow. I really don't know what to say to this. This piece is a work of art that touches me at my very core and stirs up a feeling that I can't even begin to describe. You wrote this when you were 16? Hell, two years ago I was ashamed to even call myself a writer because I sucked so bad. Even after I've improved so much I couldn't come cose to this even if I tried. You have a natural talent that few have and man (myself included) crave. Keep writing, Amzat. I know you'll touch the stars.

Shalom,
Aleksander Azrael

Posted: Jul 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much Alek for your generous praise you have really humbled me. I am so glad tou liked this, believe me you guys on
Booksie are like my oxygen, no one in my real life even looks at my work. They think wanting to write is weird, but how can i explain to them that what i write is not that bad, It is something I have to do.
I hope you can find the time to read more of my poems, if you ever do then don't miss Autumn day, Timid stream, Toy master and lonely lady, i am sure you will like them too.

im 16 and i can never imagine to write like this.. i was trying to find a poem on change, and this is so perfect! the ripples then waves and then bow down to ripples, this is poetic art!! you must be reading poems from birth!

Posted: Jul 31, 2008



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