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this is just something i wrote on the spur of the moment. It deals with depression and hopelessness. View table of contents...
Submitted: May 15, 2008 Reads: 47 Comments: 5 Likes: 3
I stand alone atop sanity's edge,
Emotions veering from hope to dread,
Sometimes they call, voices soft and measured,
Alas my wordly link has long been severed.
The world I see accross the great divide,
Beseeches me to come to its side.
The bridge I used has long since gone
I can not move, I stand alone.
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I like the simplistic style and rhythm scheme. Your words are moving and touch on emotions that I think a lot of us can relate to at some point in our lives. Short and (bitter)sweet.
Posted: May 17, 2008
Your poetry is very dark.
This one is perfect.
Posted: May 17, 2008
Whistle Whistle. Captures the essence of this emotions outward expression beautifly.
Very nicely done.
Posted: Jul 4, 2008
Second work I have read.
Much much better. Simple and elegant.
The odd tinsy stumble but other than that superb.
I love the simplicity of the language. Not many bells and whistles, rare and stylish.
Weldone.
Posted: Sep 19, 2008
I think my favorite thing about this is the mental imagery. So descriptive and still so emotional.
Posted: Oct 13, 2008
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