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"Timid Stream"

Poem By: Azmat Shah
Poetry


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Submitted: May 19, 2008    Reads: 52    Comments: 4    Likes: 4   


Lo and Behold, the timid stream that panders to the breeze,

must chart a course through broken dreams to meet the endless Sea,

It's tortous path is fraught with doubt and laden with remorse,

it must face the raging river which screams at it till its hoarse.

With great resolve the trickling stream edges to the river's bank,

singing sweet goodbye's to blades of grass who from its nectar drank,

The mournful breeze gazes at the stream as it prepares to try,

with a final prayer and tearful sigh it bids its friend goodbye.

How many streams before it have made this same mistake,

trusting the churning, swirling beast which knows only how to take,

but fear offtimes beyond a point brings on a braver state,

it sometimes forces timid streams to take the leap of faith.


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Comments:

Breathtaking and beautiful.

Almost metaphoric to the stage between teenager and adult...making your own decisions and learning to believe in yourself.

Your choice of words are enticing to me.

Posted: May 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thankyou, thankyou, thankyou lol. You my dear have just made my day. its uncanny how you get to crux of a poem and its meaning. It is a rare talent.
Yes this poem was meant to signify transition from the sheltered existence of childhood to the rigors of the real world.

What can I say that hasn’t been said by that wise owl peachy. I always find her as I wend my way through this forest. Anyway, I love this poem, its so beautifully written with lovely images. yes it shows a leap of faith we must take in life, on all fronts. Whether it be spiritually, or love, relationships r always a leap of faith. Issues of trust are also apparent in this poem. But sometimes we need to blindly show trust and take that plunge into the unknown. The greater the risks we take, the greater the rewards.

Posted: May 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Hello Mathew,
How right you are, the greater the risks the greater the rewards. Thankyou for ur kind comments and encouragement. I wrote this poem as a metaphorical journey from childhood to adulthood and i am happy that it resonates with readers. Although i really do wish peachy hadn't given the game away so soon lol.

hi! i'm no good at interpreting but 60% of times, i'm timid. the portrayal of nature is good particularly where the breeze is bidding farewell to the stream. finally the river'll end in sea. this is the course of nature. ;-)

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

There was a lot of wisdom in that poem. When pushed into a corner I can be as bold as a lion even though I am quite timid like that stream. Good read for me.

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thankyou Susan i am glad you liked it.



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