Perfection Eluded

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Poem By: Beautiful Simplicity
Poetry

Tags: disappointment, hope

I wish things could have been different. But they weren't; I just have to step forward and accept the way things have to be. View table of contents...

Submitted: Jan 8, 2007 Reads: 1632 Comments: 23 Likes: 8

This morning I woke up,

Bursting with confidence,

Overflowing with excitement,

I was convinced I'd done it,

Convinced I had succeeded

When I found out the news,

I was crushed,

Feeling empty and broken,

But somehow I managed,

To pull myself together,

Determined not to cry

Determined to be fine

Disappointment can be bitter

You feel as if you've lost your worth

But without disappointment,

We have nowhere left to go

Hope can be amazing,

You feel ready to face a better future

Because without hope,

We are forever lost

This morning I woke up,

Grasping for perfection,

Tonight I fall asleep --

Perfection eluding me,

But hope residing in my heart.

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Comments:

skydarkangel26

inspiring and wise good job :)

Posted: Jan 8, 2007

EdwardJBradleySr

Beautiful Simplicity:

Another well written poem. Liked it a lot.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Posted: Jan 9, 2007

(not registered user)

Your porm made a lot of sense to me. It feels like something I think about a lot. Good work :)

Posted: Jan 19, 2007

MondoCoffee

Hope is amazing, as are the things that bring us hope. Your writing brings hope to a brand of art too often littered with misery and angst. Great Job and keep on writing

Posted: Feb 4, 2007

Anna Therese

I like this poem too. I think we have to be contect with human "imperfection", but remain ever hopeful anyway.

Posted: May 11, 2008

Pratibha

this one is a true gem of all poems....

it soothed my soul and I will not try to torture myself amymore

Posted: May 16, 2008

EtherealleSeraphynne

Pretty... lesson offered and hope a possibility.

Take care.
T.

Posted: May 20, 2008

mum55

wonderful peice of work.......

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

November

This is really beautiful =)
I like it ALOT.
x

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

dreaming of you

first visit , will not be my last , really enjoyed the poem .

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

diannejoy

Beautiful. Thank you for sharing it.

Posted: Aug 24, 2008

Marathongman

Nice message - well written

Posted: Sep 27, 2008

As others, I appreciate this message of hope in the face of imperfection. It shines!

However, forgive my ignorance, but what does it mean when you say that without disappointment, we have nowhere left to go?

craaig

Posted: Sep 27, 2008

kidarox123

Beautiful!

Posted: Sep 27, 2008

Adam Phoenix

A true peace of work! hop is an awesome ally

Posted: Sep 27, 2008

WiredThisWay

i love it
beautiful and greatly inspiring!!
all we have is hope
hope to love
hope to be a good person
hope to be happy
hope to live to see tomorrow
hope for a better future

Posted: Sep 27, 2008

brianfatahsteele

Hmmm, I think less stanzas with longer sentences would have ruled. Just a formatting issue, but still. A great piece...

Posted: Sep 27, 2008

Dannika

That was so good, B! Oh, man, I always get my hopes up, and then they just get shot to hell! :D So, I just have to keep hoping.

Posted: Sep 28, 2008

Shannon Foster

I thought your poem was very beautiful. Very deep yet very simplicitic. Keep writing!

Posted: Sep 28, 2008

Matthew

I like that hope can be eluding. You have your heart set so high, then to watch it go only in one direction. To proceed and try again makes you a winner.

Posted: Sep 28, 2008