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If I could compare thee

Poem By: boneman
Poetry


Tags: love, beauty, desire

A love poem, trying to express how beautiful a lover is. Finally finding out that there is nothing with which to compare her with. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Oct 12, 2007    Reads: 91    Comments: 18    Likes: 8   


                                                                                                                                    

If I could compare thee.....

 

 

 

If I could compare thee,my fair maiden, If I could find something in Gods creation which could compare to thee.

I would fail in the simple account of your beauty, there are no words to express your enchanting face.

 

If only the clumsy tongue could express your beauty

the stumbling stammering words, suddenly find eloquence, a fair voice for to shame the songbirds

 

The curlew and the lark upon high would silence their cries to hear your voice

The sound from your lips would shame the nightingale into silence lest it could be compared to your voice.

 

The heavens would crumble if they thought you could be placed within them

To be compared to you, alas poor heaven they would pale and die.

 

Take to the autumn, the colours bronze and gold

All of this cannot equate to your myriad aspect

 

All clamour should cease to behold you

Pray for the sweet silence upon which fair maiden you should be praised.

 

Yet do not let silence come upon you my love

Speak ! Let creation hear you, let God himself listen in wonder at your voice.

 

Although cruel time may wither this body, upon which I am dust

As ashen as words falling upon my tongue,.

 

Never shall time wither you, as Aphrodite's beauty shall forever be spoken

Forever will your coutenance be praised until the very heavens do finally wither themselves

 

Forever sweet maiden shall I search for the words

Forever shall I stumble, my unworthy tongue useless inside my mouth

 

And yet, as day draws down upon your autumnal scene one last, one final ray shines upon you

yet fair evening sunset would pale in comparason with your face and the stars fail in the very skies lest they be compared to your eyes.

Boneman 2007


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Comments:

ok.....WOW! does she really exist? (smile) what a romantic write. (:

Posted: Oct 13, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you for you kind comment. Yes this person really does exist, but then again like a reporter I don't divulge my sources lol.

Nice!Very Nice. Such romance and love.
girlish

Posted: Oct 14, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you !

I was trying to capture a romantic feeling. For a change it seemed time to write something happy.

I just want to say that I am so impressed with your writing, this is such a lovely and inspiring poem! ~ Nixie

Posted: Oct 23, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you for your kind comments. Its nice when someone likes what you have written enough to leave feedback.

More writing soon

Boneman

this is so beautiful!

Posted: Nov 12, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you for your kind comment. I did try and capture the mood in this poem.

Keep writing

Boneman

dale
(not registered user)

oh to be this person

Posted: Nov 14, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you for your very kind comment. Maybe you can be that person who receives so much love and praise........ You never know.

Peace

Boneman

sarah
(not registered user)

what a beautiful poem. i hope you are loved as much by this person........as you clearly love her.

Posted: Nov 17, 2007

Author Comment:

I am much loved by this person........... And she does love me

isobelle
(not registered user)

this is a loving romantic poem. look forward to reading more of yourwork. is she perhaps your muse? does she inspire you to write more? i hope so.

Posted: Nov 18, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you for your kind comments. I do feel inspired to write more work.

I find it doesn't pay to reveal too much of ones insperation... :)

Boneman

jake
(not registered user)

what a very romantic poem, written clearly from the heart. you are lucky to have found love like that.

Posted: Dec 3, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you for your kind words, I am indeed very lucky to have found love that inspires me to write from the heart. Often these poems are the hardest to write when they show such naked emotion.

Boneman

claire
(not registered user)

wow i love this poem. i could read it again and again. what a lucky person your love is. wish someone would write poetry like this for me. hope you take care of her and cherish her.

Posted: Dec 10, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you for your kind comments. I am very lucky to have found her. If you can find the right person then you are blessed.

I will always love and cherish her

this is my favourite of all your works. i love this poem. such a loving piece. you are lucky to have such love in your life. hope the recipient of this work feels the same. i'm sure they will.
snowbelle x

Posted: Dec 24, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you for your very kind words....

I am indeed a very lucky man to have this person in my life.
The recipient of the poem I know feels the same way. She is very dear to me and I love her so much.

Boneman

Such a wonderful poem juliet

Posted: Dec 30, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you. I feel this poem goes a short way to expressing how I feel about this very special person.

Boneman

this is such a beautiful poem, and it clearly comes straight from your heart.

Posted: Jan 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for your kind words, I do feel that this poem came from the heart with all my love. It is quite unlike anything else I have written before or since.

Variety is the spice of live so I'm told lol.

I do love this person with all my heart and soul.

Peace

Boneman

lydia
(not registered user)

this is a very beautiful poem, written with much love. please write more like this. you obviously have a talent for it.
lydia

Posted: Jan 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Many thanks Lydia, I honestly do not know where the words for this poem came from. They just seemed to appear on the screen from nowhere.

I know where the sentiment came from........

I do love the person concerned with all my heart

Peace

Boneman

Ah, this reminds me of days gone by and a kind of classic, eternal love. You always have a wonderful way with words.

Posted: Apr 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for your very kind comment Lacey......

Maybe the days of eternal classic love are not past yet

Peace

Boneman

just came back for a reread. this poem is my very favourite of your writing. it reminds me of the first poem my someone special wrote for me. wish you would write more like this
your friend always
snow xxx

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for re reading this snow..... I am glad you like this poem.

Another one like this coming very soon

Your forever friend

Boneman x x x

I am sure 'she' exists and she is ur inspiration and ur colours

Posted: Aug 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you

"She" does exist and she is my saviour and my angel forever

Peace

Boneman

this is my fav and i keep comng back....

Posted: Sep 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you.

I think this is my fav as well

Peace

Boneman

Lydia
(not registered user)

Write for me
Like you write for her
Make me happy
I could make you purr
Write for me
I could fan your flames
Don't write for her
Please no more games.


Posted: Oct 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow Lydia !!!!!!!!

Maybe you should write some love poems. I think you be very good at it.

Peace

Boneman



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