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I Thought About You

Poem By: Brown Skin
Poetry


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Submitted: Apr 3, 2008    Reads: 91    Comments: 17    Likes: 6   


I Thought About You

 

Last night I thought about you

Thought about the ways I wanted you

The way I wanted to kiss you

The way I wanted to hold you

 

I had thoughts of us making lasting memories

Springtime kisses in the rain

Summertime picnics at the park

Laying under the heavens watching as the stars write our name

 

I had thoughts of you holding me close

Singing softly in my ear

While I float off to dreamland

Only to see you again

 

I was thinking of how, when I’m with you

I feel full

I feel restored when you wrap yourself around me

I feel special, like when a baby first speaks

I feel treasured like old antiques

 

I had thoughts of how strong our love can be

How the potential for us to be a happily ever after is more like a guarantee

We can go deeper than the ocean itself

God’s greatest gift to me

I was thinking of how I would stare in you eyes

And see me

Because I would know that I had found my rib

And your love would be so real to me

 

These are my thoughts

Do I ever cross your mind?

Do you feel the same?

You should take a chance

And make me your heart’s last dance


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Comments:

Oh! Oh, I loved this so, so much. You can absolutely read the emotion lying underneath, and the passion in the piece. It was so incredibly beautiful, and... oh, I just absolutely loved it!! Keep up the good work!! Love it!

Posted: Apr 3, 2008

Author Comment:

lol I appreciate it!!

I like that last line - poem has compassion to it

Posted: Apr 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you

Good work. The last stanza was my favorite.

Posted: Apr 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you!

I think you just read my mind! Your words make my heart ache - that's a good thing. ~ KB

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha!! Thanks!! I'm glad you could relate!

I guess even at my age, I'm still a sucker for romance! Nicely done... good expression of feelings.

Posted: Apr 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! I don't think I'll ever grow out of romance! I love it too much!

excellent, I felt warm all over after reading this. Special words are a great gift better than anything money can buy.

Posted: Apr 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! And your right, heart felt words are worth so much more than what money can buy.

Very well written Brownskin, I can feel your emotion in each line. Please read some of my latest.

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. I'll be sure to check them out

How very romantic and sweet. The lines I enjoyed most is "...how I would stare in you eyes /And see me" You definitely have a way with words!
MA

Posted: Apr 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol Thank you very much!

Your pieces are always so easy to bathe in...one feels a cleansing of their weariness once your words are read...I do love your work

JoKa
Evelyn

Posted: Apr 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow!! I'm glad that you feel that way about my work. Its very encouraging and I'm extremely grateful. Thank you.

Great as usual Brownskin, keep it up.

Olola.

Posted: Apr 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much.

That was beautiful, so much emotion. Love it.

Posted: Apr 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much

Jenny-Anne ♥
(not registered user)

This is amazing!
You are a great writer.
Keep it up!

Jenny Ox; ♥*

Posted: May 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much! Glad you liked it.

This is so beautiful and genuinely touching. I felt my heart do flick flacks at the last line. Amazing.

Ashleigh

Posted: May 15, 2008

Author Comment:

lol i'm glad it touched you! i like the "flick flacks!" thanks for commenting!

hi! jamale. the beauty of this poem is its emotional content and sensitivity. ;-)

Posted: May 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! I really appreciate it!

Hey Jamale! I'm a little late finding this but so glad I did. There are some wonderful lines in there.
You certainly have a way of expressing deep thoughts
without losing the flow of the piece.Like the way you convey the expanse of how you feel, both physically ('deep' as in ocean), and in time (using 'baby' and 'antique' as a contrast) TOP,TOP, JOB INDEED!!!

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much!!

WOW, This is a great poem.It flows very nicely.I loved it.Thanks Abby

Posted: Oct 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much!I'mlad you enjoyed it!

so exquisite and beautiful and it brought out old memories and emotions... love, i remember the feeling.

Posted: Oct 30, 2008



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