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Submitted: Aug 8, 2008 Reads: 67 Comments: 13 Likes: 4
The cool, summer night’s breeze,
Rushes through the open window.
It sweeps in around me,
Whispering through my hair
And tickling my skin
The cold night’s air, is, in itself, warmth
As a memory far in the distance,
Threatens to break free.
Of a night like tonight,
When the summer night’s breeze blew through my hair
And I was all alone,
And it was dark,
And it was cold,
And it was bone chillingly
Perfect.
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Nice. I can almost feel the shiver down my spine :-)
Posted: Aug 8, 2008
Careless verses... keep it up... the night surely spins myriad images and conjures up imagination not know before...
Posted: Aug 9, 2008
moments of solitude
can be one of the best experiences
beautiful
vivid clear words
Posted: Aug 11, 2008
Good flow, and the imagery is beautiful. Pretty, and very very good
Posted: Aug 13, 2008
very vivd, and it's so good anyone can relate to it, keep it up, a side note: i can never write in such situations, i only write write when i am an emotional wreck O_0
Posted: Aug 14, 2008
Are you living in trepidation of this memory; and is it the ambiance of the night which helps you keep that memory at bay..
Is that what makes it chillingly perfect.
I don't mean to be mean spirited about the poem.
Its just that its not as clear to me as it is obviously is to the many commentators above .
The wording is tender and beautiful.. and the piece is undoubtedlly well constructed
But forgive me but the point eludes me.
Posted: Aug 15, 2008
Catherine, simply beautiful. I could see clearly the image you were projecting.
Posted: Aug 15, 2008
Nice Catherine, You give a strong point in what your feeling and I adore that. You had me zoned out on the beautiful days for quite a bit. I like to re read poems so I know what that person was feeling but I didn't have to re read this one. It came simple and original.
Good Work
Posted: Aug 17, 2008
hmmm i liked this....very good :)
if you like vampire novels....would you mind reading mine and letting me know what you think?
Posted: Aug 26, 2008
This was clearly said... i could almost feel the persona emotion nice!!! keep it up
Posted: Sep 2, 2008
This is the second poem I've read of yours. The first was "Mama, Mama". Poetry is so subjective.
I wonder if you substituted the word "caressing" in place of "tickling" in the first stanza. For me, the "s" sound fits a bit better with the other word choices used. Also, I don't associate whispers with tickling. However, I do know lots of people mix the two just fine. --big grin--
Please understand, I still enjoyed your piece as it was written.
Posted: Sep 3, 2008
i did enjoy this poem . very seductive , i almost sent my mate vincent the vampire over to say hello
Posted: Sep 18, 2008
Beautifully done! I love this one. :) I haven't read your stuff in a while so I decided pick something random---I'm glad I did. :D Great imagery, I love wind too! Although rain is still my favorite weather pattern. :B
--------LaughingRain, still raining, still laughing
Posted: Oct 14, 2008
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