this is a tough one. i think it get the whole concept of being seduced by the oil, by the lust and avarice that comes with it. am i on the right track? i was never good at diciphering poems.

waiting for succint :).

Posted: Feb 1, 2008

Pretty deep water

Posted: Feb 1, 2008

um, well, like eraser I believe I get the whole concept..you use alot of wording that I am not familiar with...you may be a little too classy for my brain LOL! well, I never finished high school though I do like your style and I know that those who are smarter tham I will truly appreciate this alot* continue on..... glad you have found a home here...have fun....katie

Posted: Feb 2, 2008

Wow! i see what you mean when u asked me to read this. Brilliant stuff.

Posted: Feb 2, 2008

makes total sense now. don't know how i missed succinct. i must have been tired. great poem.

Posted: Feb 4, 2008

Classy Peach I can see the "likenesses" in our two poems in that the man's profession can be all consuming. However there are also differences - mine is soft, earthy, little money involved, more "countrified" I guess (and many people would not understand that men on the land can be totally consumed and taken away at nights on their job) whereas Rig Pig describes well a completely different life style of money and power and adrenalin fix etc. You also are a very good poet by the way - there is a "difficulty" aspect to the way you use words that captivates the reader to re-read and understand.

Posted: Feb 15, 2008

D'you know Peach - sometimes after reading your poems I have to go and have a little lie down. As rich and intense as ever.

Posted: Mar 7, 2008

Rapunzel Rapunzel pour down your greasy mane and let me hither once more towards your slimy wealth .
Respect

Posted: Mar 11, 2008

Been reading and reading and reading this. Took it apart in a word document, even. I really really like progression of the verses. Your personification of the rig is awesome.
The last verse... "make manner/ for his tangible sprite/ to match her sport/" Is this pointing to the narrator being unable to compete with the rig? Like she's not being given the chance by the rig?

Posted: Mar 19, 2008

Wow, I really like this - everything about it. The style (obviously, since now I am addicted to it! haha), the words you chose, the story, everything. You really do have a talent. Many of your poems make me bend my brain in ways not many do, but I like that. :)

Posted: Jun 15, 2008

I really like your stuff! I got a dual image with Iron Maiden; One was Eddie from the band Iron Maiden which once again added your dark touch through out everything for me. Quite cool. Plus she was kind of forceful and dark kind of like the band again. She kind of over powered that rig pig, took him over and did him in a very sexy way that rigid, sexy bitch, Iron Maiden, his love.

Posted: Jul 7, 2008

I get also that the oil rig thing. I take it you resent her cold steel not only stealing your man spinning his eyes green with greed and drive for her, leaving you to deal with empty veins longing. That Iron Bitch! lol. Melt her down and go to hydrogen! hehe.

Posted: Jul 7, 2008

I can see the rig as a huge painting with a woman fighting to be free of it. I like the rig pig/ rigid bitch/acidic love/tangible sprite lines they seem to pin it. Another strong one Ms Peach

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Los Capricious

Posted: Jul 30, 2008

i'm going to lay on my sun lounger in the garden , with a chilled beer , something to nibble on and read this again . it is quite brilliant ,
terry

Posted: Jul 30, 2008

so does terry but i get shifts off in the week and work weekends sometimes .

Posted: Jul 30, 2008

This reminds me of those power-epics like Giant, Gone With The Wind and Let There Be Blood. There's so many webs and double edges in life. Thankfully there's poetry to express this hungry wilderness. hahaha
Very good stuff, as usual.

Posted: Jul 31, 2008

Well penned. I enjoyed reading this and I will come back again soon. Your writing is amazing.

Posted: Nov 18, 2008