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Water Children

Poem By: Codey
Poetry


About people used by others for a specific purpose than thrown away. Kind of. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 2, 2008    Reads: 39    Comments: 3    Likes: 3   


creeping through the moon,
the water children, coming,
tear silently away the cushions of the
laughing world.

alive, and well,
eating and sleeping on the cold pavement.
they are the water children,
and the propagation of a variation
on the theme immortal.

where do they go?
after all the limiting values are taken
away?
where do they go?
once the music is finished?

there is no place for the water children,
without purpose wandering, now,
in the midst of a coiled spring world, so tense,
waiting for abrupt release.

unneeded, yet alive and waiting, calmly, forever,
for the chance to take what is theirs,
by right and by fortuitous
chance.


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This is another deep piece. I could be complete incorrect again but I will let you know the way I took it. Tides are effected by the moon but I don't think that is necessarily relevant. Considering you used tear after the words water children even though it is used to remove the cushions this leads me to believe that the water children are tears. The cushion of the world being the comfort zone within your life. A newly born vision of a changing immortality. What is the modern age mortality. Being famous giving a speech getting your memorial and then you gradually fade away. Your fourth stanza makes me feel like we are going towards rain but I still feel that tears always have a purpose. I enjoyed this again I could be way off. I did like the interpretation and the message I personally took from it though. Keep up the good work your style is incredibly unique.

Posted: Jul 3, 2008

Author Comment:

oops... what I wrote below should be here... haha?

I actually think the water children are utterly free, to do and go wherever they wish, but I see the double edge that slices them away from what they really want. This reminds me of Dylan's 'Like A Rolling Stone'.
Anyway, I'm all over the place here. Great write.

Posted: Aug 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Good interpretation. Different from what I thought but that's good!
Thanks

WOW! I really loved this poem! I took your advice on your profile and decided to read something towards the bottom. I know why you said to do that exactly, because I can relate! I hate when all the good stuff is juicier at the bottom of what's posted, because no one ends up reading it! Well I'm glad I read this one, it was one of the best ones I've read of yours so far! It was very descriptive and captivating. Excellent work! =)
~Maple

Posted: Aug 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for listening to my giant red letter scream thing. And for reading and liking.



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