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Time Altering Beauty

Poem By: controverse
Poetry


It's a simple love song. I think it's the cutest of my poems.

Uh, might have typos. Sorry in advance. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 14, 2008    Reads: 45    Comments: 3    Likes: 3   


She stopped me, there and then -

Her figure taut and still,

Frozen in mid-strut.

Long, flowing auburn hair, shining

like frozen fire.

As I took my breath back,

Her walk resumed.

How slow the world seemed around her!


Tell me now, the identity?

The identity - of

This time-altering beauty.


How goddess-like her features were

The blazing gaze of hazel eyes

Bring me back to the days

of bronze swords and tunics.

As she walked through the streets:

Head held high, long white dress trailing behind her,

The crowd bows.


Her enigmatic figure radiates beauty.

The steady rhythm of her walk

Patters me back to the age

of classical music and romance.

She would bow courteously,

Dance graciously with extraordinary men,

For she could very well be

The fair queen of all England.


Black holes? String theory?

The only thing left in the world left unexplained

Is the mystery of

This time-altering beauty.


Her gaze touched mine briefly,

And I saw myself looking into the same two eyes,

Standing at the altar, saying the words

"I do."

As I hold her hand, now a band of promise

beaming back at me.

Perhaps we would go to Venice for honeymoon.

As we venture on a cruise,

We hold each other in our arms.


She smiled as she saw me

- a beautiful crescent of the moon.

Again, I saw that same smile that greeted me

As I step into my house from work.

There, Chloe and young Michael

Pattering about my feet.

And there was the third

Within the gentle curve of her belly.

I would tell her there lies a baby girl.

She would believe in a boy instead.


No one will ever be able to tell me

How this time-altering beauty

Changes the world when she's around me.

No one could ever comprehend

What she did to me:

For she brought me back two thousand years,

But I saw our future into eternity.


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Comments:

This is beautiful, I definitely like it. I like how you made connections to the past and future in one poem; that's difficult to do. I can't really think of any suggestions for this, just keep up the good work :)

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Author Comment:

:D thanks for the feedback

This is a very cute poem indeed - the second line is a bit confusing, "taunt" - perhaps should be taut (possibly one of the typos you speak of?) I would prefer not to leave typos in a published piece of writing as it does spoil the effect of otherwise beautiful work but in so saying there wasn't too much to spoil the wonderful ballad effect of this one. well done.

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Aha, taut is exactly what I meant :) thanks for point that out and it's fixed now! Thanks for the compliment

Bring me back to the days

of bronze swords and tunics.


I loved these two lines!!

it's really well written and it just flows. It felt airy and happy! GAHHH I love it!!

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Author Comment:

:D thanks so much



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