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Submitted: Jul 6, 2008 Reads: 62 Comments: 12 Likes: 3
For every death another hole.
More saddness less joy
More darkness less light
For every death antoher needle
The pain it brings
The sorrow it sings
With so much death only brings black
The loss of one puts a hole in my heart heart
The empty hole impssible to fill
Not even another pill
The sorrow i have
You could not understand
I scream the nite
A terrible fright
Another dead
Another hole
My heart is no more
Untill u have been badly mained
An empty heat
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Well, Mario, it is a hell of a poem. Excellent grammar and great writing! However, depressing as hell.
Posted: Jul 6, 2008
Lol agreeing with Fonzie, great poem, but a little depressing; I shouldn't expect any less from you. Nice work!
Posted: Jul 6, 2008
Wow, that's so cool. Very nice poem. Good concept, and great visual.
Posted: Jul 6, 2008
Have you seen death...witnessed death.. it would appear that you may have, as I felt the hole once again in your writing....Great writing
Olwen
Posted: Jul 6, 2008
sad poem...but i loved it!...the way you have put your feelings is marvelous!
Posted: Jul 7, 2008
Powerful words ftw! T'is incredible!
Posted: Jul 7, 2008
sad, definetly
but i like it, its dark.
nice.
Posted: Jul 8, 2008
this is quite depressing but i like it =D
Posted: Jul 8, 2008
Very very sad.... extremely depressing. In fact, though it is in its own right, I'd advise you to please write some light-hearted poetry. In the meantime.... check out my story and leave a comment..... viewable from my booksie page.
Posted: Jul 9, 2008
This is awesome!And sad.Really great job!!I like this. :)
Posted: Jul 12, 2008
This is great I love it!!
Posted: Aug 13, 2008
I actually really like the visual and rhyming at the beginning especially, and I understand your words, unlike some people, even if it is depressing...;)
Posted: Aug 14, 2008
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