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Silver Tongued

Poem By: DefinitionOfSoul
Poetry

Tags: tongue, friend, depression, past, reality, hearts, love, mastermind

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Submitted: Oct 16, 2007 Reads: 100 Comments: 2 Likes: 2

Quick-tongued mastermind
silver squinted eyes-
shading the dream
of love’s illusion.

Painful words
spoken apart between the hearts
of mere mortal men.
Dissatisfaction?

In all living things.
To be alive - such a mystery.
Unbeknownst to his heart;

the soul’s desire
spilled forth from within

the twisted path
of his reality.

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Comments:

devilrod

Yes, some people and things are dark mysteries.
Great poem.

Posted: Oct 27, 2007

Author Comment:

Definitely.
Again, thank you. I greatly appreciate your comments. :)

zer0

Very well writen. I noticed your profile mentioned your poetry doesn't rhyme. Well it doesn't need to, its called free-verse form. I think its the most widely practiced form of contemporary poetry and you use it to great effect here. Besides you do use some traditional poetic devices(more than most people ive read on this site)even if you arn't aware of it. For example the alliteration of "mere mortal men". The imagery is physical and yet elusive at the same time which reflects the whole "dark mystery" theme. I think its a great piece and look forward to reading more of your work.

Posted: Nov 21, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you.
I'm a big fan of free verse (Pasternak especially), and imagery is something I'm constantly working on.
Again, I appreciate the compliment. : )