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Temporary Tattoo

Poem By: dubl
Poetry


I don't know how well this will be recieved so I've decided that unless I get a lot of comments on it, i'm just going to take it down. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 22, 2008    Reads: 33    Comments: 4    Likes: 3   


Welcome
you are trying to exist
And you're pushing at the walls
But they won't budge a bit
And the stereo's been static
And it's locked up in the attic
So you couldn't change the channel
If you wanted, if you wanted

How long
will we stand here and fight?
it's a pointless bash and brawl
And I don't have the time
Cuz the future is misleading
And I need a change of scenery
And you never understood
What I wanted, What I wanted

But let's just stop
I'm getting too far ahead
Of myself again
And let's just stop
But even if i started i know
You'd be right there and you'd hold
My hand and saythat we're more
But stop
What is it
That you wanted

You're breath fogged up the window dear
I couldn't see the future
The past was what I should fear
Forget it just forget it.
Cuz we've been circling like sharks in the water
I've been pulling my hair at the order
To forget you to forget you
It's not what I hadwanted
Trust me
But sometimes
Giving up is all there is to do
And tonight I'm giving up on you.


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Comments:

hi! dubl. this is so unlike that other poem of urs. the first para made me remember, when i bang my head on the table and the table dents but my head remains intact (and i bang more with no result). sometimes giving up is best for it is not defeat but changing one's perspective.

and don't give up on the poem too and take it down. for it'll've a life of its own. many poems r enjoyed at leisure. it'll be one. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks bubbly. you actually might have saved a few things other than this poem :]

very nice:) i'm experiencing different kind of emotions as i read this... and still having them... hopelessness is one of them

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Hopelessness is one feeling but I didn't write this about a person or anything. I wrote this about a baby. The first stanza he's inside the womb. The stereo is his mother talking and it's all the way up in the attic. And of course babies kick in their mother's bellies. Needless to say the boy's parents fight and they get divorced and he never knows his father. So that part where "but i know that you'd hold my hand and say that we're more" is because I know how awkward it is not seeing your father for years and years and then having them try to come back into your life and be a dad is rough. Thanks indiefreak.

very good.
unlike most of the poems of yours that i have read
but yet i still like it
:]

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha yeah this one deals with past emotions not present ones.

Thanks Ally :]

Well...I like some of the other ones better, but this one is still REALLY good!

Posted: Jul 30, 2008



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