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Submitted: Sep 3, 2008 Reads: 90 Comments: 11 Likes: 6
In the dark
It screams to me
It's cries
Fading through the endless land
It's embers, sparkling brightly white
It's beauty, flaring through the night
Forever,
Sounding through the sky.
It's ancient call,
Will draw us in
The dark black flame, shall burn us all.
Beware my son,
We must never touch.
It's dark seduction,
My prayers for such.
Now go my son,
Through the fearsome night.
Beware though,
Of the darkly light.
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Well worth waiting for.
Nonna
Posted: Sep 3, 2008
hi! thomas. this is a parent's caveat to their son to beware of an evil force, who is enticing. who's this dark flame. i'm curious. liked it very much. lol. ;-)
Posted: Sep 4, 2008
It's dark seduction
You are such a innocent flower...but UR heart and soul think like the deep ocean and think like the flight of an EAGLE....
U have a spark buddy and even if this one was posted after a long time...this is worth the wait as NONNA said....
Now, post again soon....ur poems are fresh, with a difference and make an impact on soul....trust me buddy....GO AHEAD GRAB THE MOON AND STARS AND SUN.....
Posted: Sep 5, 2008
Great writing. Really good piece.
Posted: Sep 8, 2008
that was really good!! i couldn't right a poem to save my life...lol ^ ^
Posted: Sep 9, 2008
Wonderful Thomas, your writing is getting better and better, cant wait for the next one.Love auntie Mimie
Posted: Sep 15, 2008
wow, a very vivid peice of work, truely gripping and well written. nice work my friend, very well done.
Posted: Sep 19, 2008
Cool, dark poem man, i like it, very intense
Posted: Sep 20, 2008
Great use of oxymoron, in the title and through the poem. Loved the fluid way with which the poem moves. Wise, deep thoughts, skilfully expressed. Bravo!
Posted: Sep 20, 2008
oh wow this Ive me good images, I see things in my head form this i cant even begin to describe in words. I love the whole concept! Nice one.
"Of the darkly light." is my fav line.
~Reaper
A knight of Booksie old
Posted: Oct 8, 2008
wait.....
i 4 got 2 comment on this 1
lol
better than any other poem
i've ever read b4
Posted: Nov 15, 2008
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