The eve of battle

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Poem By: Elzeranova
Poetry

Tags: elzeranova, poetry, war, the, eve, of, battle, poem, fear, death, destruction, anxiety

A poem set upon the eve of battle View table of contents...

Submitted: Jun 25, 2008 Reads: 103 Comments: 8 Likes: 6

Here we wait

Scathed and forsaken, knealing in the softly mud.

We make no sound, but our anxiety flows like the blood from our wounds.

We grip our hatred, our fear, as we do our tools of war.

We are the wind before the storm,

The fade before the crescendo.

The silent song of war,

Forever sounds upon this ground,

This ground of Blood and dust and mud .

And then the rain begins,

A sign? An omen?

And with every solumn beat of our condemmed hearts,

Sounds the silent song.

We are the eve of battle

Here we wait.

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Comments:

FunnyBunny

Oh my I liked this.

"We make no sound, but our anxiety flows like the blood from our wounds."

My fav line. I loved the way you put wounds in there. very nicely done.

ILI vote

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks! I'm glad you like it, that was probably my favorite line too.
~Elz

lemonluv

woah this was really good!!!! you compared things really well! and last but not least you captured the emotions in the poem awesomely. all in a;; good job!
~Lemon

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, glad you liked it! :D I was really aiming to capture atmosphere and emotion. Thanks for noticing that.
~Elz

Pratibha

THIS IS MARVELLOUS....keep me informed about ur new posts...

Posted: Jul 3, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you! I'll be sure to keep you informed

Pratibha

See I told u that I liked it....lovely one...i wish i could have voted for i more than once...lol...

Posted: Jul 3, 2008

Author Comment:

I am reluctant to use amazing again but I really feel that it is. One can really "see" the people you describe, it is almost as though you have experienced this situation.

I would like to see one of your "fun" Poems to balance out the range of emotions.

You might like to visit Urja's page, she is obviously a very experienced writer and always makes constructive comments on people's work. Similarly "itsinthetelling" and Anna Therese, and for some-one closer to your own age, Rio SU Kashyap. I think that you would like Rio's style as I see similarities with your own.

Thank-you for telling me about "Booksie" I am really enjoying reading the Poems, they have taken up so much time I haven't got around to reading the stories as yet. I don't think that I will ever need to go to the Library again!

Keep up your writing and I am sure that one day we will see your work published !

Love Nonna

Posted: Jul 25, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you! I will definitely have a look at all the writer's you've mentioned, I'm glad you can really understand and feel my poem. I didn't realize it was such a much loved poem.