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Pitch Black & Peace

Poem By: Enyo
Poetry


Found this nestled under my heaving collection of paper and scrap. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Mar 19, 2008    Reads: 46    Comments: 2    Likes: 1   


Disastrous plains, held at the reigns
You don’t know how to deceive me.
Ignoring the pain, fighting the chains
I’m longing for something to free me.
 
I held on tight, to every fight
I couldn’t’ let go if I tried.
It’s time to scream, let go of this dream
Hit my reality; denied.
 
Delve in my eyes, ignore my cries
The truth is beginning to sere.
I’ll hold my tongue, songs remain unsung
The heart is going numb here.
 
Drowned beneath cold water’s breath
Lungs are filling, increasing depth
Bindings are tighter, with a mind of their own
Pitch black and peace, your fate now unknown.
 


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that last stanza was amazing! "drowned beneath cold water's breath" is my favorite line.
great poem!

Posted: Mar 20, 2008

Author Comment:

:) i love this one too. One of my earliers but I agree, the last stanza leaves you a bit breathless when read, which i really didn't imagine would happen! Enyo

Wow...^_^! This poem has given me some ideas!! It's awesome. Dark, but awesome^_^. I also really liked the last stanza. It's like she's opening up her mouth and getting ready to scream. You really creatively portrayed emotion here-- awesome job!!!!! I also liked the first stanza-- especially the first line. The word "reigns" really caught my attention.

Lot's of special chocolate to you,

Ghiradelli Girl.

Posted: Mar 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha! thanks very much! i'm really glad you liked it, i love the darkness of it as well and it's pretty cool you've interpreted the last stanza really well!
thank again:) Enyo



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