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It snowed here yesterday and these are some pictures a friend took while we were out for a walk. View table of contents...
Submitted: Jan 15, 2008 Reads: 118 Comments: 36 Likes: 19
Snow blankets all
like confectionary sugar -
a fantasy land.
Hydrants are toadstools;
we walk on the clouds.
The light is different,
whiter, brighter.
The day is quiet,
sound swallowed
in a blanket of powder.
The road is still dark.
But for awhile
at least
We are in a different land.
~~~
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Gives a surreal image, pretty.
Posted: Jan 15, 2008
i like it. your poetry has a.. well, some sort of beauty about it. i can't quite put my finger to it, but i like it (:
Posted: Jan 15, 2008
Enjoyed your poem and photos very much! Very unique combination and most effective. Thanks for sharing your fine poetry and photographs. Happy writing.....Jerry
Posted: Jan 16, 2008
Nice to read a diffrent poem.....Really great read the pictures bring it alive..... Have a happy day in the snow....Would like it to snow here as i am a big kid at heart.......Thanks for sharing this experience Juliet
Posted: Jan 16, 2008
Wonderful poem! The photos were a perfect touch!
Posted: Jan 16, 2008
A marvellous read...felt like I was there.
A great place to be.
Nice one Eraser.
Posted: Jan 16, 2008
Lovely poem, perfect at this time of year ~ Nixie
Posted: Jan 17, 2008
I wish it could be as beautiful outside near me as this poem depicts. I have snow, but it's so cold out there your eyelids would freeze to your eyeballs, heh.
The pictures really add to it, but your imagery was excellent in that it would have worked even without them :)
Posted: Jan 20, 2008
its beautiful, i wish i could just go into the scene and melt (but it'd be too cold for that... hehe) i enjoyed it. :D
Posted: Jan 21, 2008
Yes I too love the snow youve captured that almost lonley but serene feeling that its white blanket brings, lovely writing love how you compared snow to confectionary and hydrants to toadstools it make me almost feel the place was alive well done!!1
Posted: Jan 21, 2008
Since I remembered I thought I would check out the snow poem you mentioned. I thought the pictures went well with the poem and gave the fantasy view a realistic view as well. I enjoyed it. Thanks :)
Posted: Jan 23, 2008
The imagery is really nice. I like it.
Posted: Jan 28, 2008
Very nice piece. I always viewed it as a wonderland rather than a depressing scene :) So pure...
You have to show me how you put your pictures up like that. Is there a site where you can upload to and then use the url to put into your work?
Posted: Feb 3, 2008
Greetings,
Wow ... a winter wonderdland in your own front yard. I am jealous. Your, so eloquently written poem, describes the gorgeous scenery you have provided to a tee. Kudos to you!
Best regards,
Cindy G
Posted: Feb 6, 2008
i love it-i love the wispy feeling i get.
:)
Posted: Feb 7, 2008
I Like your descriptions in this piece, Winter is a different wonderland for all. well done.
Posted: Feb 11, 2008
hey, i came to read this again!-it keeps making me come back to feel the wonder!
:)
Posted: Feb 12, 2008
What a wonderful poem this is Eraser! thanks* katie
Posted: Feb 17, 2008
That's so beautiful! I love it!
Posted: Mar 3, 2008
Great poem - loved the toadstool hydrants.
Posted: Mar 9, 2008
Lovely poem. I like the short lines, the soft sounding syllables, the imagery, especially "the light is different, lighter, brighter" and "sound swallowed in a blanket". The pictures are glorious. Very nice!
Posted: Mar 19, 2008
How attached are you to that last line??
Posted: Mar 19, 2008
i made a few edits to the flow. still not sure it is right. my poetry technique is very poor.
Posted: Mar 20, 2008
Great imagery. I love snow, too.
Posted: Mar 20, 2008
Good poem man =)
Posted: Mar 21, 2008
Simply amazing! Commendable use of metaphors. Also, I like the brilliant combination of the lovely pics with your equally delightful poetry. Keep it up :)
Posted: Apr 11, 2008
Really loved the way you captured winter so simply.
Evelyn
Posted: May 4, 2008
your poems seem to bring a lot of good memories for me. I love the snow. The poems and pictures remind me of when I lived in New York. Walking out side right after it snows is the greatest.
Posted: May 6, 2008
This is indeed wonderland (sans Alice). Great work. ;-)
Posted: May 14, 2008
Very dreamy and comforting. As if, despite the cold, the beauty of such scenery alone is warming, like a heavy blanket. Great job. :)
Posted: Jun 10, 2008
It's very dreamy. I also like how you worded this poem. I like snow so yeah. =]
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
wonderful poem! and excellent pictures too... =)
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
I loved it
Especially since I love winter
Very well written
:)
Posted: Jul 21, 2008
cool! you also added realism with the pictures =)
Posted: Aug 6, 2008
this poem cooled me (intense Californian summer right now lol) good work! ^__^
Posted: Aug 6, 2008
I'm a true lover of winter, and this right here, is a big reason why. It really does make the entire world seem like a wonderland. I liked this peace, thanks for sharing it Eraser!
Posted: Aug 16, 2008
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