Fighting Darkness

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Poem By: Erin
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Tags: teen emotion

I wrote this when my 8th grade English teacher told us we had to write a deep poem. Deep poems with me are usually dark, confusing, and many other emotions. Basically what many teenagers lives are like; full of drama, chaos, and emotion. View table of contents...

Submitted: Jun 6, 2007 Reads: 109 Comments: 11 Likes: 4

The darkness is starting to settle in,

It's taking me over it's starting to win,

The darkness has caught my life in a spin,

Its deadly plan is about to begin,

I want so much to run and hide,

I want to get get off this emotional ride,

I'm tired of feeling numb inside,

But there's no where left for me to confide,

My life slowly begins to disappear,

Now my life is nothing but fear,

Cries and screams is all I hear,

The end of my life is drawing near,

The pain won't die it's all I know,

It's becoming more of a friend than foe,

Grades and standards are becoming low,

There's so much pain I don't want to show,

The darkness has trapped me it's got me tight,

I tried to hold on with all my might,

But nothing in my life was going right,

I was just to weak to win the fight.

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Comments:

Terry Collett

For just the honesty alone this poem is worth 5/5, but it has more to offer, good theme, good structure.

Posted: Jun 7, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you.

ddrandall

Erin I believe my 16 year old will relate to this very well... even though I was 16 a hundred years ago it seems... LOL, this piece took me back to that time... that season in my life... great emotion shown here... write on my friend!

Posted: Jun 8, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you. Yeah, I wanted to base this off crazy emotional times for teenagers.

(not registered user)

Any teenager that writes from the truth will relate and it will always be dark, these are dark times after all, (taking a bow) that was great very honest.

Posted: Jul 22, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank ou so much.

Love Always,
Erin

(not registered user)

"It's becoming more of a friend than foe" That is definately my favorite line. As all your work, I can relate to this sooooo very well! It just.... its amazing! Your ryhme and rhythm are wonderful... just... wow

Posted: Jul 24, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you. Your comments really make me smile, and encourage me to keep writing.

cris x

well if you want me to be honest... i would have to say that this is my favorite piece that you have written so far! ever consider writing a novel?

Posted: Feb 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you and yes I have actually I'm in the middle of writing it, but I don't want to put it here until it's finished because I won't update it enough, but when I do finish it, it'll be up here.

Love Always,
Erin

Eric JHRB Egan

This is good, I know what you are saying. When I was a teenager, I was so dark and foreboding. No one wouold have thought that I would turn into a loving romantic guy who travels the world.

Posted: Feb 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes, it's a dark time but there's always a light. Thank you for the comment.

Love Always,
Erin

Zia Jaycee

Yes... I understand this poem sooo much....great job and keep writing from your heart :)

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, Zia. And trust me I will.

Love Always,
Erin

X4EverIamBrokenX

I love this piece i can relate so much.
your an amazing writer

love always,
-Cami

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, Cami.

Love Always,
Erin

bubbly

hi! erin. i like ur stress on the word "darkness" by letting it be black. ur pain is all too apparent in the poem. tell me, if u dwell in pain, pain is what'll come back. but if u'll look up at the rainbow, its colors'll cheer ur heart. even if there is no happiness in ur life, no one can stop u from looking forward to it. for a pretty girl like u, sky is the limit. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much Bubbly. And yes that is so true by just dwelling in it you accept it so you will never get out.

Love Always,
Erin

LaughingRain

Good poem, I liked it a lot. It's got a nice rythm to it although of course the emotion behind is much more apparent--I just notice things like that. :P Definately deep stuff, keep it up! And remember: Darkness is nothing if there is no light.

Posted: Aug 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much Laughingrain.

Love Always,
Erin

viper

This was really good.I like the rhyming.Pretty sad.You should check mine out titled "Feeling Depressed."I think you'll be able to relate to it.

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

OK I will, and thanks.

Love Always,
Erin

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