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Another one I wrote almost a year ago. I personally think that it's too short and a bit incomplete, but that time it was all I can think of. I didn't even have a title for it, so I just put the date when he left. It was a sad goodbye, maybe that's why I couldn't write and think much then. View table of contents...
Submitted: Sep 11, 2008 Reads: 49 Comments: 5 Likes: 4
I won't walk you on that road
Where you're going to leave me
Don't say goodbye my darling
Just turn your back on me.
I leaned myself on the wall
And shut my eyes into tear
Everything is gonna be alright
I told myself not to fear.
But I wonder if you will care
About the songs we used to play
Will you still listen to them
When you are already far away?
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well...i didnt think it was incomplete at all, personally:P
I really like this one^^...It shows your emotions really well. :-)
'i like it' voted!!XD
Take care
Posted: Sep 11, 2008
I like it - not too short
Posted: Sep 11, 2008
erm1980:
Gave it an "I Like It" vote.
Will read and rate the remainder of your postings. At times, without leaving a comment.
Thank you for becoming a fan.
If you would like to know some of my own thoughts about writing poetry, you could read the comments section of my posting of "Love Intended: #1, #2 & #3".
If you have not done so already, please read some of my postings entitled:
1. "Epitaph-5 (Wealth!)",
2. "Excitement Inspired....",
3. "Our Grampa Ed",
4. "Love Intended: #1, #2 & #3",
5. "Limerick For Life",
6. "Self Love",
7. "POEMS",
8. "Here To Stay" &
9. "Katie Anne".
Again! Thank you!
Happy trails,
Ed Bradley.
Posted: Sep 14, 2008
Well! -that first stanza is a powerful one. It states the refusal to participate in the leaving and it's sad~I like the title. Sometimes details like that make it real and that is an asset in a poem; I think. Like'd it for that, ~rain
Posted: Sep 23, 2008
it is a sad but very real story you tell . we never forget the songs do we ?
Posted: Oct 3, 2008
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