A Little bit of Pain

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Poem By: Eternal Night
Poetry

Because maybe he hurt me...just maybe. View table of contents...

Submitted: Apr 29, 2008 Reads: 43 Comments: 9 Likes: 4

We sat, you and I
And stared across the sea
You and I
We had a thing
If a thing it was indeed

I held your hand
And begged you to help
The small little girl
Lying and your feet
It was as I stood up
And said please, for me?
That you looked away
Pushed me down
Ran way

But did you stop to see the tears
For many there were
Did you stop to see my pain
Left behind in vain
I thought I loved you
But now I see
It was never meant to be

A thousand years past
And I still hold the pieces
Of a heart beyond repair
Broken, Forever

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Comments:

poewhit

Hearts broken rattle in our feet as we walk.

Posted: Apr 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Sadly wonderful. :) Eternal Night.

Crazyguy

Nice poem, sad, but I know how that feels. It's a really bad feeling, but I got over it just as everybody.:) I liked the poem, good work.:D

Posted: Apr 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Yeah, I know what you mean. Thanks. :) Eternal Night.

fred

Ta`daa this was aftermath of love, by Eternal Night ;)

Great Work !

Posted: Apr 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Got it in one. Thanks fred. :)

Alice Oiseau

nicely said eternal night!
i thought it was written nicely and the message behind it was something we can all relate to.
been there, done that, as they say.
great work! keep it up! :)

Posted: Apr 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Once again, thanks Alice. :)

bubbly

for ur age, u've a good style and equally good poem. well done. feeling unwanted and uncared is never comforting.

Posted: Apr 29, 2008

Author Comment:

No, it's not ver comforting at all. Thanks. :) Eternal Night

Pratibha

lovely work...sad also

Posted: May 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks :)

JoleneMoon

Aww this is such a nice poem. I like the image of two people sat and staring across the sea. Really good. :D

Posted: May 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!! :) SMILE :) Eternal Night

I read this again and realised that my mom was right....such people who leave us in the mid way should never be a part of our lives ever.
Life is so beautiful and it should never be wasted on such people who don't care for us.
hard to accept but those who do accept are happier and move on....

Posted: May 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes, people who can't care for us end up hurting us. They shouldn't be allowed near enough for that to happen. :) Eternal Night

Maple Bowen

Oh, very sad and touching, I love it so much! You wrote it in such a way that it showed everyone the emotions. Great work, keep it up! =)

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey, thanks. Glad you liked it, or as u said loved it lol :) Eternal Night

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