Dear sir

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Poem By: Eternal Night
Poetry

Tags: poor, hungry, poverty

This is a bit of a weird one. I started writing on one topic, for the first couple of lines and then it just kind of changed with out me even thinking. Anyway it kind of ended up with a poor, sweet, homeless child who is just asking the passers-by for money. Enjoy. View table of contents...

Submitted: May 6, 2008 Reads: 37 Comments: 4 Likes: 2

Excuse me sir,

Did you not see me there,

Lying on the ground

Please sir,

Do you not have a moment to spare

To lend a little help?

Excuse me sir,

Are you just going to ignore me?

Go home then,

To your sweet little life,

Where you may sit,

And eat

And be sheltered from cold

Dear sir,

Sleep tonight

Content, with a full stomach

So go on home

And leave poor little me

Out in the cold

I forgive you already

As I do every other

Good night Sir

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Comments:

matmoo

Really good poetry. The best I've read today in fact. Brilliantly structured in rhythm and rhyme.
good stuff!
matmoo :)

Posted: May 7, 2008

Author Comment:

AWW thanks!! How many have you read today? Lol just joking. :) Thanks
Eternal Night

Pratibha

oh ....so sad,
homeless kidswho have no food and shelter and nobody bring tears tomy eyes.
My papa was homeless and an orphan and he had to work hard to earn his PhD in Chemistry and he was determined to do it. He did it by his own merit and received a scholarship to study further. He did so much for us and I feel indebted to him forever.
He will tell me "In this world of competition, forget that u r a girl and so u cannot do it."
I believed in him always.
This poem revived all those memories of my papa being a homeless and an orphan when his family died in the cholera epidemic in India when he was a kid.

Posted: May 11, 2008

Author Comment:

That's really sad, but well done to him for working his best and proving himself. It proves that even unfortunate of us have a chance, though they should never be in that position. He sounds like a teriffic man. :) thanks for the comment. Good luck to you in the future.
Eternal Night

Alice Oiseau

aww :[
so sad.
it reminded me of the movie Oliver based on Charles Dickens' book.
anyway
i loved it. whenever i read about those who are homeless or poverty stricken, i always want to just reach me hands out, and help them and make everything better. but i can only do so much..
great poem eternal night. i loved the rhythm you had to it. nicely done ^^

Posted: May 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! It's so sad to see those who don't have the means of creating a better life for themselves. It's awful. And terribly sad. Thanks :) Eternal Night

JoleneMoon

I can't believe I didn't comment sooner! This is so sad :( Makes you think how lucky some people are to have a home, and good food each day... and a bed to sleep in, and friends that are there for them!
A really good poem, I love the repetition of 'Sir', alters the tone and makes it even more awesome :P

Posted: Jul 23, 2008