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Submitted: Apr 26, 2008 Reads: 49 Comments: 8 Likes: 4
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I like it, it does bounce around a bit, but I get the general message of it. I like it, it's cool, very free flowing.:D
Posted: Apr 26, 2008
I like the whole stream of consciousness thing you have going here. It makes the poem seem so natural, wihtout a complex rhyme scheme or specific rhythm; juts pure emotion, the way poetry should be.
Posted: Apr 26, 2008
Poem has a joyous feeling to it
Posted: Apr 26, 2008
Second read - put your hands to the plow and sow - learn from the clods
Posted: Apr 26, 2008
togetherness is desired yet difficult to keep up with. this idea expressed in blank verse, brings it out effectively. kutgw. ;-)
Posted: Apr 26, 2008
great poem eternal night! i liked this one muchly... it had this very relaxing and free flow to it. though the last lines... they kind of sharpen the tone. "a life i forgot" it kind of makes this turn in the tone. at least, thats how i interpreted it.
keep up the great writing!! :)
Posted: Apr 26, 2008
I agree with Alice Oiseau, the sharpened tone at the end. It's a really nice effect, I like this poem. Certainly does show a lot of emotion =]
Xx
Posted: May 16, 2008
this is nice!
Posted: Jun 20, 2008
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