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Submitted: Apr 19, 2008 Reads: 57 Comments: 6 Likes: 2
Your touch is as cool,
as the ocean's mist
Your lips are as tasty,
as a strawberry kiss
Your shoulder is as hard,
as the rock that I lean on
Your shoulder is as damp,
as my tear-filled eyes
You have me your shoulder,
You gave me your hand
You gave me a kiss,
that will help me stand
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awww, that's adorable...makes me think of someone special;) lmao. Good job, the flow was really good and catchy. LOVE it!
Steph:)
Posted: Apr 22, 2008
your touch is always special and one is bound to remember it for life. well-written.
Posted: Apr 23, 2008
i found it very romantic.. and sweet =) the last two lines especially make it seem like the person finds strength in their love.. excellent job!!
Posted: Apr 29, 2008
That's sweet.:) I like it, it flowed very well, and very was romantic.:D
Posted: Apr 30, 2008
Wow wow wow... Excellent one!! Looking forward to more writings from you! :)
Posted: May 6, 2008
I mist say that this is amazing.
I am currently doing a romantic peice on a first kiss for my GCSE's
and this is my inspiration.
Thank you.
Posted: May 12, 2008
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