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Submitted: Oct 10, 2008    Reads: 24    Comments: 1    Likes: 0   


It's hard to stay in the light when she shadow seems so bright, my days are now night and I find it hard to determine the difference. Living with eyes covered in a mask of blind optimism I look now and see around to realize through my own eyes, this mask is not a crown. Walking down this path bathed in darkness I see nothing yet I realize so much.

I cannot continue on.

I must fight the source.

I must turn around.

I cannot stay this course.

I think as I look into the comfort of the dark and of the cold, "I know this is not right, I will win this fight, try as you might, I am solid, I am stone."


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I like the four lines between the first and last stanza. Sounds strong and musical. Those lines could be grounds for a bigger piece of work.

Posted: Oct 29, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you, i'll have to take a look at it and see what i can do about it.



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