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Life-sonnet

Poem By: ezzy
Poetry


it's just a sonnet i made being an ammature but i liked it so read if you like. It's not the best but i'll do. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 26, 2007    Reads: 73    Comments: 6    Likes: 1   


The meaning of life is just existence.

Or�one just strives to survive for their life?...

Life can be meaning full and worth wild,

Or be meaning less and futile.

Life has many meanings to everyone.

To some life has only one meaning... Death.

For one who does not know their destiny,

It can be full of surprises�or be�moot.

If one knows their future, it won't be true.

Life needs to be erratic either way.�

It can be shared with someone whom you care,

Or it could have privacy with no worries.

Life can be flustery or be carefree.

It all depends on how one lives ones life.

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Comments:

ezzy:

If your intention was to write a Shakespearean style sonnet, then it must have 14 lines of 10 syllables each. Let's analyze. Some spelling corrections.

1. The meaning of life is just existence. (OK)
2. For one just strives to survive for their life?(OK)

3. Life can be meaningful and worthwhile,(9 syllables)
4. Or life can be meaningless and useless. (OK)

5. Life has many meanings to everyone. (OK)
6. To some life has only one meaning... Death. (OK)

7. For one who does not, know their destiny, (OK)
8. It can be full of surprises being moot.(11 syllables)

9. If one knows their future, it's not the same. (OK)
10. Life needs to be erratic good or bad. (OK)

11. It can be shared with someone you care for, (OK)
(Can be shared with someone for whom you care.)
12. Or it can be private with no worries. (OK)

13. Life can be frustrating or be carefree. (OK)
14. It all depends on how you live your life.

Could not find a rhyming scheme. As in even numbered lines: 2&4, 6&8, 10&12, 14(?) Or 1&2, 3&4, 5&6, 7&8, 9&10, 11&12, 13&14. Rhyming, if used, needs to fit some kind of pattern.

Hope this helps.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Posted: Aug 26, 2007

Author Comment:

Not again i suck at ryhming as you can tell huh well thanks again a thousands times i'll fix it and try to give it ryhm its just i don't know how to ryhm well though and thanks againg for taking your time in reading my ametureness knowing i spelled that wrong too and correct thanks.hope too read form you again i got more stories to update if you don't mind reading and a hi chance in correcting.


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i liked your idea, life really can vary and it makes the reader reflect on how they are living life, at least thats in my case. it was good, and listen to Edwards advice, i would. good job and welcome!

Posted: Aug 27, 2007

Author Comment:

thank you, greetings and yea i'll take edwards advice. thanks for reading it and glad it made you think about life.

oooo nice sonnet!... i wrote one about life infact "battle of words". But ur poem is very good:d even thought they dont ryme. but still very good:D

Posted: Aug 31, 2007

Author Comment:

i know i suck at rhyming but it is good huh and thanks and thanks for reading it i hope it changed your perpective of life can be?

It may not be written in Shakespearian style, but it's a sonnet just the same. They are hard to write, I wrote a sonnet on my page titled Cherokee, it started out fine the first part then I ran out of rhyming words. So don't worry about it, you'll get better at it with practice.

~DarkFairy~

Posted: Sep 3, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you yea they are hard and its hard to ryhm them. Thanks for reading.

This is good ezzy, you do not suck, so dont be hard on yourself, life means different things to different people depending on what each person's desires are and what each person aims for. Though the purpose of life and of nature is to pass on our genetics. However we are here to enjoy and live and learn and love and leave a legacy also.

Posted: Jan 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you and yea I am starting to like life, lately.

Wow... Even I was impressed by your ability to express your self... And you and I both know how hard it is to impress me.

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Really? cool. Yea I know it is.



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