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I Hope You Know....

Poem By: findingmyway
Poetry


This is my poem for Lemonluv's challenge - my song to write about was "My Wish" by Rascal Flatts. The way I wrote about this song was building a story based on a guy friend around my favorite two lines of this song, "I hope you know somebody loves you, and wants the same things too." I hope that this is close to what I was writing before, so please comment honestly. This is dedicated to my best guy friend, Daniel, who really does help me through hard times. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 24, 2008    Reads: 2444    Comments: 58    Likes: 16   


For many, many years now,

You've always helped me through the dark.

And I can only wonder how,

But you definitely left your mark.

It was our first year at a whole new school,

And everyone was a couple, except me and you.

Life had begun to seem so cruel,

Yet, you knew EXACTLY what to do.

With tears welling in my saddened eyes,

You wrapped your arms around me tight,

Looked me in the eyes, and said,

"I hope you know somebody loves you,

And wants the same things, too,"

As if you completely knew.

You often spoke those famous words

For the next three years of my young life.

And we'd hug so tight until it hurt;

That was how I'd get through strife.

But on our high school graduation day,

Your world began crashing down,

And I knew EXACTLY what to say,

Because of the times I bore a frown.

With tears welling in your saddened eyes,

I wrapped my arms around you tight,

Looked you in the eyes, and said,

"I hope you know somebody loves you,

And wants the same things, too,"

As if I completely knew.

The heavens opened up, and it began pouring rain.

Our own tears blended with those falling drops,

  And we held on tight, as if to escape all pain....


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Comments:

That had to be one of the most beautiful poems I've read in a very long time. I'm not lying. I loved it. You have an amazing talent. It was truly wonderful. =) Mandy

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Aww thank you very much, that's very sweet of you to say.

Its really good! I liked the romance in it!! please do find the time to read my short story "where is the love?"

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, I'll definitely read your short story..probably tonight, but I will. :)

...
omg!
that was so amazing

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much, I didn't know if it'd come accross this good, I just wrote about my guy friend who seems A LOT stronger than me, and a lot of times is strong enough for both of us. Thank you again. :)

Hello,
ur poem was very poignant and heartfelt. The sentiments you tried to portray shone through the simplicity of your verse. Just go over the middle part of this poem once more, it does not gel as effortlessly as it should with the rest. The beginning and end were both exceptional.Congratulations on a job well done LOL.

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Ok, thank you a lot. :) I was having a harder time with the middle, but the beginning and end were definitely very easy.

That was so beautiful and inspirational. You really did a great job with this. I loved it!!

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much..I always look forward to your comments. :)

very beautiful its inspirational i liked it a lot.

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you :)

that was sooooooooo touching. i liked it soo much. you did a great job on this! like others have said, THIS IS BEAUTIFUL!!!
~Lemon

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much, since it's for your challenge, I'm glad that you also like it. :)



That was so beautiful and touching and awesome! And I totally almost cried! And I love it! lol.
Great job!!!

~!~Megan~!~

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Aww I'm glad you think so, thank you :)

this is really romantic and sweetly spoken...really good job...

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you :)

oooooohhhhh, now that's true frienship, what a blessed thing to share! ^_^
~katie

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes it is..:)

Sweet and romantic! ^^ It brings back old memories from high school. ^^

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, I'm glad it did. :)

this is a beautiful poem and i can relate to it in many ways thinkin of it i felt i was there when it happened very beautiful

ohh if you dont mind can you check out my 3 poems their quite new and i need a honest opinion to get a vibe too get better or if it was good !!

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, and I'd be glad to check out your poems. :)

this is REALLY good. i love rascal flatts.

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, so do I. :)

What an incredible poem. The support through rough times, that are cherished indefinitely! The encouragement you gave one another and you didnt have to say a word, you just knew. I love this, it stayed with me the whole time I was reading. I didn't have to go back and read it. It drew me in.......Such a Lovely, beautiful, warm poem. I love it!

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much :)

hey, this was really good. I liked it a lot :) Kepp up the good work

~Brad

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks :)

first of all - i love that song by rascal flatts ^^
secondly - this is such a great poem!!!! i loooooved it! very touching and heartwarming :) it made me smile and now i'm in the mood to listen to that song XD
haha
excellent work!!

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Aww thank you a lot..that's really nice of you to say. And I love that song too :)

This poem was so amazingly sweet and love of love and compassion. I absolutly loved it, wonderfuly beautiful poem!

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much! :)

I love the way that the use of narrated words made this poem flow so well. It seemed very symmetrical if that makes any sense. I enjoyed it a really sweet story of young love.

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you :)

You have a very good talent. It was beautiful. Really. Now I have to read more of your work!

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much! :)

hi! f. it doesn't seem like a fictional work but a personal account. and colorful break of stanzas individualises each of them. on the whole, love holds supreme. well done. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, bubbly! :)

Its really good! I liked the romance in it!! I love romance.They are so magical:)

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, so do I :)

loved it

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks :)

I loved this! It was absolutely wonderful...not kidding. =D

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! :)

keeping writing that was really really good!!!!

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks a lot! :)

very touching and so sweet!! good job on the challenge!! =)

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for reading and such a sweet comment :)

This is an amazing piece awesomely written. I love it.

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, I'm glad you do :)

beautiful...........esp. the rain and tears part!!

absolutely wonderful!!!!!!!

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much! :)

wat a wonderful poem...
its really is beautiful... && touching

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Aww thank you :)

Omg! Best poem ever!!

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for such a sweet comment! :)

This is sooo beautiful!It made me cry.I remembered of something...Beautiful poem!Really great,so touchy,sad,great! I like it alot.

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much..that means a lot to me :)

that was an amazing poem. you can tell that you really put your heart into it. i can only hope to write as well as you.:)

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Aww thank you so much..that's very kind of you. And I bet you will. :)

omfg that is a marvoluss poem

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! :)

o damn, that was really cool. Do you mind if i maybe showed that to some of my friends? I think it would help if they read this. Also if you would return the favor and maybe check out some of my work it would greaty be appreciated.

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Of course, feel free to. It'd make my day if my poem could be of help to anyone. :)

This is a very emotional poem that I suddenly became fond of. This could penetrate even the iciest soul, NO KIDDING!! My sister is a complete poetic nut... and even she is helpless to the mystical charm and romance your poem presents, and on behalf of me and my poem-crazy sister, we BOTH LUV "I HOPE U KNOW..." LOL!!!

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much! You have no idea how good your comment makes me feel :)

I love the way this story/poem flows. Wrote with such a loving emotion. Everyone should have a friend in their lives that just knows what to say when its needed.

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks a lot Vee, I always look forward to your comments and opinions. :)

This is the MAGIC of friendship and MAGIC of YOU....

Don't worry, every thing is perfect for common person like me.....And when a common person loves and understands and identifies himself/herself with ur writings, know that U have done a magnificient JOB....

MMM UUU HHH AAA

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you tons Pratibha! You've made my day :)

I am glad i am ur fan.....honestly

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you..that has got to be one of the sweetest things anyone's said to me. :)

I loved this poem, I really did. It was touching in so many different ways... It just saddens me a little that I can't honestly write a love poem. Sure, I can write it from a different point of view, but I won't know exactly what it is... Oh well. Sorry about that rant. >o< Anyways, I loved it :)

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much, Laurel. :) It's okay, I can't write a whole lot that doesn't revolve around love..who knows, you might get it some day, right? :)

i don't know what to say... this is...

SUPERBLY GREAT!

it is romantic, warm, comforting... one of my favs!

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much! :)

All in all I have to say that this has to be the most warm, touching, and real poem that I've read in ages. It's so comforting and makes you feel good just to read it. Congrats are definatly in order. Well done!

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for such a kind comment, GeminiGirl. :)

xxjojo14xx
(not registered user)

hi i think this poem is great i can feel the emotion running through it and this is a powerful poem and its touching to

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks :)

I absolutely adore this poem but I have to know was it meant to be more of like a romantic thing or a friendship thing? either way though its just beautiful and I totally love it

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you a lot, april. :) I wrote it as a friendship, but it can be either way, depending on how the reader wants to view it.

oh my this poem was amazing. I'm not a poem person but i completely understood this and it was really beautiful. Good job, I really liked it! =]

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, Kyoshi! :)

Wow, I LOVE Rascal Flatts. "I'm moving on!"
Lol, you picked a great song to base your poem around. Thanks for writing this, it was enjoyable. I can see you becoming a great writer one day, keep it up please.

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for such a high compliment, Scorpia. :)

Thats so touching!

can u give me a tip?

u know how you do an author comment?


how do u do that!

I can't figure it out!

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, and I'd be glad to. When you're looking at "Comments Received - Have Not Responded", to the right of the comment will be, 'reply' and 'delete'. Just click 'reply' and you can read the comment and type your response into a box below it. Hope I could help, Panda. :)

I like the friendship angle. Are you two still very close? Nice job.

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, Dragonfly. And yes, we're good friends. :)

So many comments because this is a wonderful "feel-good" poem. It is sad, sweet, warm, beautiful and loving.

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much, as always, for such a kind-hearted comment, Anna. :)

Once again, another amazing poem! I don't think if theres anything else to say! you are a brilliant writer, and you always write moving and emotional poems.
Megzbo-x

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, Megzbo. Your comments are always so humbling. That's very kind of you :)

even though i am young to appreciate the depth of this poem. But i can say one thing sincerely and that you love someone very dearly.
i am new. pardon my interpretation.
can i be your friend?

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for reading it, and sure. :)

well written....i loved it and i can see why others do to

James

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much, James. :)

That's was beautiful
Romantic and touching,
Well-written and thoughtful,
An Emotional and moving piece
You're an amazing writing :]

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for reading and such a kind comment, Allison. :)

That's was beautiful
Romantic and touching,
Well-written and thoughtful,
An Emotional and moving piece
You're an amazing writer :]

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, you made my day! :)

that was such a good poem. It reminds me of one of my guy friends and how he listens to me when i need him to. I love it!!

Posted: Jun 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! :)

it is interesting to see how many people are touched by a strong friendship - what an envy must be to your other friends...Your poem shows a touching balance to your friendship and your choice or words conveyed your thoughts quite clearly - hence the reason we can all feel this too. Good.

Posted: Jun 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, julistar. :) I'm glad to know that I can get my point accross clearly to everyone else.

wow so many comments! And it is deserved, what a lovely poem

Posted: Jul 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! :)

aww thats so sweet1 aww bless, well done!

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, sonia :) ~ Susan

AWWWWWWWWWWWW so sweet... lovely loving poem!!!!!

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you :) ~ Susan

beautiful

Posted: Sep 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much :)



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