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There You Were

Poem By: findingmyway
Poetry


Tags: poetry, support, love

This poem is basically a sweet love story. (I know, practically all I write are love stories.) It's about a girl who fell in love with an unlikely guy, and..let's just say sometimes things do happen the same way twice. I hope you enjoy this. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 10, 2008    Reads: 88    Comments: 11    Likes: 7   


As I walk down the aisle with my Daddy next to me,

You stand there with tears in your eyes.

And in my mind is "How can this be?

That someone like you sees something in me?"

We’re steps apart now.

My heart’s pounding faster and faster.

In the time before we profess our vows,

I reflect on how I fell for you...literally.

It was September 14th of our junior year.

You were captain of the football team.

And through all the noise, your voice was all I could hear,

But I didn’t exist.

As I began walking down the stairs,

I tripped and fell.

Next thing I knew, old Nurse McCree was giving me stares.

And then, there you were.

I don’t know what you saw.

But now, here we are.

"Sweetie, watch your step!" Daddy calls,

I’ve lost my footing and can tell I'm falling,

And then, there you are.


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Comments:

Awww. That was so sweet. I got a lot through this poem :) Very clever indeed. And I just loved the way you ended it. It was really, really good. I'm impressed. Definetely " I liked it" vote worthy. :P

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!

Great write, it is very sweet and reminds me of my wedding day.

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm glad to hear that! =]

i agree, it is really sweet. it's good to see some people can have happy endings. i like it lots!

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm glad you do! =]

This is a very cute story. I think the parts you bolded do add to the effect. I enjoyed it :)

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, I'm glad you did!

Very sweet and romantic. I can tell that is came from your heart. WOnderful job. :)

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

It definitely did..thank you so much :)

Very sweet and romantic. I can tell that is came from your heart. WOnderful job. :)

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Your such a romantic.... :)
A beauitful, sweet, straight from the heart poem.
I like your style in writing.....very graceful.

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha yes I am..it's my weakness. :) Thank you so much

I really enjoyed this poem. Great imagery!

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm glad you did..thanks! :)

You think on many layers and I don't think you realize that yet. Cool.

Posted: Jun 15, 2008

Author Comment:

You really think so? Thanks! :)

I really like it, I dont know exactly why, but I did :)

Posted: Jul 3, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm glad you did :)

Constructed perfectly, it flows like prose with your wonderful style..

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you tons, devilrod. ~ Susan



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