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This is a darker version of Snow White. It's called Snow Dark. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 2, 2008    Reads: 25    Comments: 1    Likes: 1   


Snow Dark

The vendor’s cry traps one white like the snow. 

The apple is bitten, hope dashed to ground.

That horrid merchant! Once, friend, now the foe!

Lightening venom as she waits to be found.

 
That killing fruit gathered from the orchard.

A gourmet sauce made from evils and sin.

A kiss can end the pain of the tortured.

Mona Lisa's fruity grin hides poison.

 

She dreams and dreams, peace at heart in her glass.

Panic ensues, her protectors afraid.

Deep in her slumber, that ethereal lass,

A quick cure was sought, an endless brigade.

 

           Until her prince comes, she's waiting forlorn.

           Stuck in her glass chamber, waiting for morn.


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Comments:

I liked this it was really good. I like that line "Lightning venom as she waits to be found". That was my favorite line. This poem reminded me of Snow White but you did good imagery and you made the reader feel like you were actually their or feeling that venom pain so Bravo!

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow! NO one's ever said I've made them feel like they could connect in one of my poems before! I'm honored and elightfully surprised.



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