I absolutely LOVE ORIGINALITY. That's the trick to keeping me interested. Why is your poetry growing leaps and bounds? There must be some kind of healing going on, me thinks.

I've told Lionheart before, when something bad happens we automatically sit back and try to decipher every little detail about who we are. But we forget to do that when something Good happens. And every once in a little while, our back of the brain inner sanctuary will send waves of joy when we self analyze when something Good happens. There is always room for growth.

The last line of each paragraph is an awesome sum of the paragraph. Realization. OR, idea...this could be about dumping yourself before you actually get dumped on. Your poor heart. You are holding it like an intricate piece of fine china. When in reality, wouldn't it be lovely if someone did that duty for you?

Will I ever know what you look like? Random thought.
Beautiful poetry Lien.

You're such a jerk.
*smiling sweetly

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Hello,
peachy almost had me searching for a dictionary by the way she described ur poem. But now that i have read it i see that the words you used are not all that hard to decipher lol, i didn't have to reach for the dictionary once, that's a relief. This poem was amazingly well done and the imagery you portrayed was sad yet wistful. It read almost like a short story and you put in so much in so few stanza's. Each stanza seems to represent a different aspect of love's journey, peachy is right it seems to personify healing and coming of age. Thanx for an enjoyable read.

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

This was a very good poem, regardless of what is goinging
On inside of you. You start feeling something and you have to write. I don't write that often, but I can tell when a poem is coming on. Keep up the good work.

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Huh, well to me it sounds as though, she wants to be set free, and fully enjoy the game of love/lust once more but; while he pushes she is held back by the fear of being hurt, so the body can not decide if it should jsut lay there 'lifeless' or open up, and the 'thinking' mind kinda gives up and she 'gets lost' inside his desires, though the crashing at the end could either be an emotional breaking or just a letting go of the senses? ha, I don't know lol

very good write needless to say, though i don't think I did a very good deciphering cause when i go back up to read I begin to pick up more but ta ta, I am too tire right now. ^_^ thanks Lien, you will find someone, and find someone again, and then maybe even again lol, best wishes ~katie

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Wow. Now I know I'm not going to write as much as other people but that poem TOTALLY ROCKED! I'm all about express strong emotions in poems! So I understand. Air took all the words out of my mouth...JK but seriously...

I really love it! One of the best poems I've read.

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Oooohhhhh deeper FunnyBunny, interesting. I wish to get deeper with my poetry too, but I write on impulse. So whatever comes out usually isn't thought through, just words flowing through my pencil. Like my lastest poem xD

I don't really care for it, but it was a thought I just had to let go of.

Hehehe, wet dog hair, at least yours doesn't look like mine right now, half curled from falling asleep with it wet! I hope you replace that tape someday, otherwise we'll have Lionheart find you someone xD !

~DarkFairy~

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

hi! lien. if she's sensible, she'll bid him goodbye and breathe. but, ur interpretation'll stand tall. nevertheless, it's different and soulful. keep going. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

A VERY STRONG POEM . MADE ME THINK , MADE ME SHIVER TOO BUT THATS TWO THINGS AND YOU KNOW WHAT US MEN ARE LIKE AT MULTI TASKING .

Posted: Jun 24, 2008