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I Was A Child Once

Poem By: FunnyBunny
Poetry


I'm 22 now and this poem is about some of the pressure I had to cope with when in school and a lot of kids 2day have to deal with the same thing aswell. I really REALLY suck at writing poems so dont laugh-just try and see the message. AS always - comments welcome.
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Submitted: Aug 27, 2007    Reads: 168    Comments: 10    Likes: 3   


I was so nervous when I entered school

didn't really know who I was

didn't know where I belonged

I was a child

I was only 14

 

A year later and I'm more relaxed

I know whats going on and who to trust

I did my school work, I went to play

I was still a child

I was only 15

 

I'm a year older now, a bit more smart

My friends and I went to a party

I never drank before but didn't wanna look dumb

I woke up feeling like death but my friends cheered me on

The child was slipping away

I was only 16

 

Another year passed and I'm always drunk

smoke in my hand, man on my side

My grades are slipping, my life is mine

Everyone knew me, I thought it was good, they saw me for me

No longer a child

I was only 17

 

My last year of school and I'm no longer pure

He told me he loved me and took what I could never get back

My life is pathetic, no longer want to be

 please make me dissapear

I'll never be innocent again

I was only 18

 

A few years later, my life is different,

from drunk to sober, irritating to quiet

all because

He picked me up and held me tight and all He said was

Welcome Home

I'm whole again

 


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Comments:

Dino
Dino

Interesting style and structure, good work.

Posted: Aug 27, 2007

Author Comment:

Thanx so much! Means a lot to me. - Thanx for taking the time to read it. I was just trying to be as honest as possible.:)

air
air

very nice poetic story, and very well structured as Dino said....:)

Posted: Aug 27, 2007

Author Comment:

Thanx for your lovely compliment. I hope you enjoyed it. :)

whitehart
whitehart

This is well written...don't think you suck at poetry at all, I think you are pretty good!

Posted: Aug 28, 2007

Author Comment:

LOL - thank you so much! Thanks for reading this. :)

YuperMan25plus3
YuperMan25plus3

I really like this one!
It was awesome. Captured perfectly!

Posted: Sep 4, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you so much for the lovely comment!
Eileen

Qcontinu
Qcontinu

Wow, I usually am not into poetry but that poem was beautiful. You are such a talented writer.

Posted: Sep 12, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you for the comment! I never write poetry but thats just all I want to write these days.

EdwardJBradleySr
EdwardJBradleySr

FunnyBunny:

Most devotional and prayerful tale of redemption. Liked it. A lot. Good job. Perfectly presented.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Posted: Sep 19, 2007

Author Comment:

Thanx Ed! it kinda sums up my life.
Thank you for reading and commenting

Lionheart

pretty personal, dont know whether i would ever go that far. haha. you think your bad at poetry, so do i, so i have no real qualification in saying this but it was good
like something else......... (thought you were a lot younger).....

Posted: Sep 23, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you for reading Lionheart. Yeah, its pretty personal but if I don't write about stuff that happened in my life, I would have nothing to write about. I'm not so sure I understand your comment - you think I'm bad at poetry 2? Good like something else? I'm confused. haha
No, I'm 22 I only seem childish sometimes.
Thank you for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it.

wolffe

Nicely written. powerful and revealing. keep writing, there is a talent here.

Posted: Apr 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Wolffe.

dreaming of you
dreaming_of_you

now here is something i do enjoy , beautiful poetry , really enjoyed it ,
xxxx
terry

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Terry

bubbly
bubbly

hi! lien. this is all part of growing up. i'm glad i read such an interesting account of a part of ur life. may ur sobriety continue. thoughtful. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Aww thank you bubbly!



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