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Poem By: FunnyBunny
Poetry

Tags: hate, funnybunny, depression

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Submitted: Mar 10, 2008 Reads: 82 Comments: 9 Likes: 4

My body is wrecked

jagged corners make me

My heart acts like a thorn

hurt someone else to make me feel safe.

I have lost control

i no longer know who i am

I keep on searching, looking for me

the me before you

The uncontrolable urge to end it all

keeps getting stronger and stronger

consuming me all together

until only a shell is left

Your love kept me alive

your rejection made me terminal

I'll never be your rose again

only the thorn stuck in your side.

The darkness draws me in

i remember you, i remember me

finally, I give up the fight

and end it all with one kiss goodnight

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Comments:

Twilightangel

~Wistful sigh~ This is a wonderful and lovely peom! I invite you to my profile sometime.~Twilight

Posted: Mar 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanx Twilight! I'll do so

DarkFairy8907

Ooh, FunnyBunny is playing with colors. Very powerful poem, the last line is my fav. I can't wait to see how Lionheart response to this one. Great piece.

~DarkFairy~

Posted: Mar 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Yep I got pretty bored with black & white. Thanx DarkFairy.

poewhit

The last line is good, it comes at you like a fast ball.

Posted: Mar 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you poewhit. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Lionheart
(not registered user)

poewhit is right, the last line comes very suddenly. I just kept thinking about what you had told me... about... experiences. There was a part that sent shivers up my spine; "hurt someone else to make me feel safe", i think we have all done that at one stage in our life. Its a pathetic defence that we have as humans.
I thought it was dark and beautiful... and i like dark and beautiful ;)
I cant get you out of my head now... this poem got me thinking about what you had told me...
Thanks for inviting me to read it, it was more than worth it.

Posted: Mar 11, 2008

Author Comment:

I didn't mean for the poem to come out as dark but I'm glad you liked it! Your opinion really means a lot to me. HOnestly, I've no idea where this poem came from! I just started writing about it and started pouring my feelings into it. I hope you enjoyed it. Thanx for the read Lionheart. ;)

rose89

i really liked it! it was dark but still gr8 job!

Posted: Mar 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Rose.

MissGC

very soul felt good job thank you for sharing

Posted: Mar 11, 2008

Author Comment:

My plesure Miss Gc. Glad you enjoyed it.

Jason Christiansen

I just barley found this site and have not read many of the other writings on it but you have won me over as a fan. I love the how it flows off your tongue from beginning to end. Thanks!

Posted: Mar 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Jason. I'm glad you like it. Welcome to Booksie! I hope you enjoy reading the rest of my work and I'll be sure to stop by on your page. Thanx again.