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The second in a Series of Poems that explains whats going on in my life right now. View table of contents...
Submitted: Mar 30, 2008 Reads: 52 Comments: 5 Likes: 2
Dear Betrayed
I never meant to hurt you
but I didn't surprise myself
You never let me be me
even though I'm not good enough
for anything
I don't know if you'll ever know
but it sticks to me
like a sickness
If only I could turn back time
I would have thought about it twice
and not only about me
I know now that I'll never be happy with you
but I'm prepared to stay
just because I'm sorry for the hurt I caused
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So sad, you have the reader really wondering what it could be about. But leave it as a secret. Since its related to the other poem it really makes you wonder and feel SERIOUS guilt and self loathing... Be happy!....... :(
I like the length of it, it went well with the content. Nice Lien, nice.
Posted: Mar 30, 2008
At least you're honest with yourself - good place to start!
Posted: Mar 31, 2008
i agree with lionheart, this is so sad! you're making me wonder what happened... but leave it secret. unless you want to reveal it. i tend to reveal stuff through metaphors though. so you could try that for future poetry. just a suggestion. ^^
Posted: Mar 31, 2008
Thats sad - really happiness is the bottom line of it all. [ an old 60's saying - if it feels right do it ] ????????????????????????
Posted: Mar 31, 2008
it's sad.. but right now i feel the same way as you!! I'm proud that you can express how you feel about it, because right now i'm too weak to express how i feel. great writing!!!!
Posted: Apr 1, 2008
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