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You're My... (Lionheart Challenge)

Poem By: Hugs and kisses
Poetry


Ok, Lionheart, how did I do?

My words:
1. Pericardium
2. Adamant
3. Alacrity
4. Pleonasm
5. Winsome View table of contents...

 

Submitted: May 25, 2008    Reads: 74    Comments: 13    Likes: 8   


You’re my smile, my laugh,

To hold me up, you’re my staff,

The sweetness on my tongue,

My heart’s pericardium*,

 

When I talk about you,

There’s always a smile, good and true,

When I talk about you,

I develop a bad case of Pleonasm,

I become the most avid talker the world has seen,

When I talk about you,

There’s a twinkle in my eye,

One that no one can deny,

 

Do you know?

How much you’ve affected me?

How every day is full of alacrity?

Do you know?

Do you really know?

 

The sincere eyes,

The winsome smile,

The number I always dial,

The way you hold my hand,

The way you help me stand,

 

Only once, I’ll tell you this,

You don’t want to miss this,

By your side, I’ll never leave,

You, I’ll always go and retrieve,

Adamant are my feelings,

My heart is what you’re stealing.

 

You're my heart,

You stole it from the start,

You're my song,

My right, my wrong,

The best thing of all time,

Is that you are mine.

*Pericardium is something that surrounds the heart and protects it from decease and other things like that.


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Comments:

BAM, CRASHING SYMBOLS, POW! OVER THE TOP!!!!!!
how did you do it? I don't even know what those words mean. but it all sounds good!

I see you explained pericardium but that one i knew.
what about the rest of them for us "not so smart"
peeps LOL! you have met the challenge and quashed IT!!

Posted: May 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Ok...
Alacrity: being cheerful/lively happy like basically
Winsome: charming, handsome ect.
Pleonasm: using too many words to say something e.g "true fact" or "free gift"
Adamant: your sure about something and you won't change.

Well, that's my definitions of them, don't worry, I had to look up alacrity, pleonasm and pericuardium...so I'm not exactly a genius either :P anyway, thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem so much!

What a great poem with such difficult word choices!! I loved the read!! I think it's great how Lionheart's challenge has stretched us all and brought so many of us together for the first time!! Happy days.....Jerry

Posted: May 25, 2008

Author Comment:

totally, I agree with the whole "challenge has stretched us and brought us together" thing. I think I have a new favorite word now as well...pericardium...I love that word now!!!! Anyway, thank you so much and I'm really happy that you enjoyed it, and that you took the time to comment!

awww, so cute hugs and kisses. You did awesome with the challenge:P hehehe, This poem was really adorable!

You're my song,

My right, my wrong,

The best thing of all time,

Is that you are mine.

was my favourite part, it made me smile:D
GREAT JOB!
Steph(:

Posted: May 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! I never thought I'd use Pericardium in a SENTENCE, much less a POEM! But I'm glad you liked it, I was rather proud of myself for using all the words ^.^

o_o I'm still mad I didn't get those words. But you did really good :) After all, I can't be mad at you for getting the words I wanted because you didn't choose them.

When I saw the words you got I was like.. huh? Then I looked up the ones I didn't know and I was inspired. *sigh* Maybe I'll get better words next time :(

Posted: May 25, 2008

Author Comment:

lol when I read my words that's what I thought too "huh?" You can still do a poem with the words, I want to see what you'd do with them. That would be really cool! And if you do, tel me so I can read it. Anyway, thank you so much for taking the time for commenting!

OMG, my head started reeling with the difficult words....

never theless, you did a marvellous job....way to go buddy....

Posted: May 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you. When I first read the words I was like 0_0 and then I looked them up and got inspired, much like Angela did when she read my words. Anyway, thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

oh my goodness! hugs and kisses! this is wonderful!!
i loooove the use of pericardium!
it was a very uplifting and beautifully written poem
great job ^^

Posted: May 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! People actually like this poem! Yay! At first the only part of the poem I really liked was the first stanza, but now I'm pretty proud of myself. I'm also kinda hyper on ice cream...BUT THAT'S OK!

I'm glad you enjoyed it, I really am. Thank you so much! And thank you for taking the time to read the poem and comment on it ^.^

*claps and cheers* Good job! I wish I could write like that! Those were really hard words, and you managed to make a fabulous poem out of them. Tell me when you write more, I'd like to see it.

Posted: May 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! I have to go read yours now! That's why this reply is so short, I just can't wait to go read your poem! Well thanks again! Toodles!

*stands and claps* you so nailed this challenge :) when i first read your words i thought no way this is gonna be way to hard but you have done it :)i love this poem it is beautiful :) awesome work :) i just accepted the challenge and now im like so nervous to get my words :( hahahaha ~ as a side note her i would really like to see AngelaSteele do a poem using these same five words :)

Posted: May 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you soooo much! I'm glad that you enjoyed my poem. And don't get too nervous about your words, I'm sure you'll think of something. And YOU probably didn't put "the words can be as hard as you want" like I did...hehe...anyway, thank you for taking the time to read my poem AND comment ^.^

God-- how are you so good at making everything rhyme-- and at the same time making it all make sense? Sheesh my friend! You're so good at poems!

You alway seem to do something on relationships-- but it's all really sweet^_^! Not in the least bit cheesy, my friend. Hmmmm... I think that all those vocabulary words really did a good thing to this poem-- it's really, really good!!!!!!!!

Okay... now I'm going to give you a challenge of words-- I want to see what will happen...

1. shroud
2. epitome
3. azure
4. chivalry
5. silhouette

Now bring on the next poem using those five words, okay? Okay?

Lot's of special chocolate to 'ya Ghiradelli Girl.

Posted: May 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Ok, first about the relationship part, I really wasn't planning on having this a relationship poem but it was hard to incorporate "pericardium" in my poem...but thank you so much! It's so good that you liked it! And I'll totally start on the poem you challenged me to do. I'll think of some for you as well!!!

Wow! You are so awesome! How did you do that?

Posted: May 26, 2008

Author Comment:

awwww thank you piggy! You're so so SO sweet!!! I'm glad you enjoyed it so much ^.^

Big words mingled into a simple poem. Loved it

Posted: May 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. AND thank you for taking the time to read my poem and comment on it ^.^

i love the words he gave you. you did a great job with them.
Lydia_xxxx

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

awwwww thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed them! I'll be sure to check out some of your work too ^.^

Lionheart
(not registered user)

You are the sweetest little thing. I love the word pericardium, im glad i rubbed it off onto you :)

I think i subconsciously set this up for you HAhHahAHH!!!! This is brilliant writing! I dont know what to say... it left me stunned and i was very anxious to read this and finally i have and i love it!!!
I dont know what else to say... all i want is for you to go 'awww' in response... DO IT!!!

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Author Comment:

awwwwww and I would have done that even if you hadn't asked, you're too kind Lionheart. Gosh, for a first day back since I've been sick I've been having a pretty awesome day ^.^ I'm really, really happy that you like it, I personally thought it was a tad cheesy, but who doesn't love a little bit of cheese? (well...except me, I actually don't like cheese...BUT THIS IS BESIDE THE POINT!) Thank you so much for the comment ^.^ you're way too nice to me =^.^= I may even hold back on the puggles!



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