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The two seasons

Poem By: indiefreak
Poetry


In Malaysia, we have only the rain season, and the draught. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: May 15, 2008    Reads: 70    Comments: 12    Likes: 7   


It’s the month of March
Heavy downpours start till June
My house is a little hectic
Because the clothes are not drying
Electricity keeps going out
The TV satellite can’t have a good transmission
On and on with all the complains
Why oh why the sun won’t shine?
 
It’s the month of August
The sun shines brightly till October
My house is still hectic
Because the heat was unbearable
The tanks have no drops of water
Fires occur in dry places
On and on with all the complains
Why oh why the rain won’t fall?
 
 


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Comments:

This is pretty good.
I liked it.
On to read more of your work =)

~mandy

Posted: May 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you :)

This was really good! i had no idea there were only two seasons in malaysia...

Posted: May 16, 2008

Author Comment:

hi dubl! Thanks. Yeah, I hope we've got four seasons too. But we have to be contented with only two... haha...

This was so cute, I love it! To me it captures the essence of human nature: unhappy with the rain, and then unhappy with the sun; the grass is always greener on the other side lol. Awesome!

Stephanee :)

Posted: May 16, 2008

Author Comment:

hi Stephanee! Thanks. We're always like that; not happy with our conditions...

hi! if. u give a good description of what life is in Malaysia. both the seasons are extreme there. good work. ;-)

Posted: May 19, 2008

Author Comment:

haha... Malaysia does have extreme two seasons. Thanks bubbly!

Nice how the stanzas contradict eachother- i like it.

Ash

Posted: May 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Ash :)

I wish I could come there and share ur experiences with you. Can u post some beautiful snaps of the country for us....I love your country and its people..........innocent and sincere and honest

Posted: May 26, 2008

Author Comment:

I'll find some nice pictures then:)

Anything I write now will seem repetitive, so I'll just say that I liked it. ^^

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Don't worry. i write repetitive words too. Thanks for coming and reading and commenting:)

even though it did not rhym it was discriptive and good!

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

i planned on not making it rhyme. i was kinda in sarcastic mood when i wrote this, not really into rhyme-ing at that time...heheee... thanks for reading it:)

I forget you have the monsoon seasons. This was an excellent poem in that we are never satisfied. It is either too cold or too hot or too windy or too humid. It is always something.

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Yeah. Sometimes the conditions are satisfying, sometimes it just drives us mad...lol:)

I love this indie! Thanks for inviting me to read, I really like your fresh style;)

The mess caused by the rain was all around me as I read, I felt like I could reach out and pick up a damp cloth!

Great details, not too much; nor too little.

Need a towel? lol;)

~rain

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

lol! it's been raining recently but i managed to keep myself dry:) Thanks for reading^_^

Haaa...!!! When U something want, it don't come. When U don't want, it comes. It's like, when U need a book, U can't find it on a table. But when U don't need it. U can see it every where. :):D:D Good one.

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

Author Comment:

very interesting comment here. i enjoyed it:)

It's been like that all summer. It's been either chilly and wet, or hot an dry. Wet times we beg for no rain, dry times we beg for rain. I guess each time we got what we wished for huh?

Posted: Sep 25, 2008

Author Comment:

yep. when we have something we don't want it, but when we don't have it, we wished for it;) weird dilemma we're facing



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