I’ve grown a pair
Of white large wings
But I cannot fly
As far as I wanted
I’ve built myself
A castle in the air
But I am afraid
Without the solid ground
I’ve found the light
The joyous victory
But I still walk
In the silence dark
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Submitted: May 17, 2008 Reads: 93 Comments: 17 Likes: 5
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I am sure this will inspire many of us....too good...
never say again that u r not good in poetry....
this is very good ...great
Posted: May 17, 2008
I agree with Pratibha. You are wayy too good to say you aren't. So next time you do, I shall call upon the panda gods and get them to drop one on you =)
Just kidding, one; I can't do that, and two; the panda might crush you and we can't have that happening.
Great poem girl, keep it up ^.^
~mandy
Posted: May 17, 2008
hey why you are saying that your not good?...i love this inspirational poem...keep up the good work...great job!
Posted: May 18, 2008
wow. that was really good indie :]
Posted: May 18, 2008
This is a really good poem. Wel all go through times when we are not confident about ourselves. But until we try and see what the future holds for us, we can never know how happy we truly can be. I am sure you will be able to get over the issues you have. Remember, you have friends here who believe in you. Wonderful poem. Can't wait to read more.
Posted: May 18, 2008
hi! if. looks like something sad happened when you wrote this. Both optimism and dejection are here. ;-)
Posted: May 19, 2008
hi indie. :) just want you to know that I really liked this poem. take care. :)
Posted: May 20, 2008
Why are we trapped...just a moment away from our true destiny...just a heartbeat from freedom...just a galnce away from love....just a step away from death...i really felt your poem...you are emerging from the chaos....escaping the duality....keep on keepin on.
Posted: May 22, 2008
Sis...I'm so proud of u...watever happen, always remember that I'm always beside u(Like u always did 2 me)...Luv u..lol..n_n
Posted: May 25, 2008
See I told you , i loved this one so much that i came back again....
Posted: May 26, 2008
YOUR POEMS ARE REALLY GOOD, TO ME IT SOUNDS LIKE YOU ARE NOT TOTALLY HAPPY WITH THEM BECAUSE YOU ARE TRYING TO FORCE THEM, JUST LET THE WORDS COME TO YOU, SOMETIMES YOU HAVE TO TAKE A BREAK FROM YOUR WRITING FOR IT TO BE THE BEST:) GREAT JOB:)
Posted: Jun 6, 2008
This is my favorite poem that I have read of yours so far. I hope to be reading more soon. ^^
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
hi indie... you invited me and here i am...
i liked this poem. the first verse you say that "i cannot fly as far as i wanted " think about it.... you can fly ( flying - freedom )
Second verse ' castle in the sky" translated in afrikaans "lugkastele" when someone says you building that you're dreaming.... without your dreams you're nothing. Keeping your feet firmly on the ground , keeps you modest, sincere, and safe...
the last verse - contrast - you found the light yet you're walking in the dark. It's like you can't accept the good that's come to you...
It's just my take on your poem, the way i read it...
Posted: Jun 11, 2008
HHMMMM. . . .W-O-W!
I just couldn't believed what i just read!
This is like a great miracle to me.
I really liked this poem!
I will sure read your other works!
~~LeAnne :]
Posted: Jun 12, 2008
This is absolutely so beautiful. I love the ending
I’ve found the light
The joyous victory
But I still walk
In the silence dark
Sometimes it seems like silence is around us constantly even though their is a lot of noise and hustle and bustle of crowds.
Posted: Jun 19, 2008
Great poem! I love how it is short, sweet and to the point. Keep it up!
Posted: Sep 29, 2008
Confidence....Tsk....Tsk... Why do we writers belittle ourselves and let ourselves feel worthless and useless...
I can promise you right now, your not the first person to feel this way.
I think it's very brave that you actually express it, I don't think I could ever.
Its hard to feel confident somethimes, but your an amazing writer, keep that in mind.
~Lady Leah~
Posted: Dec 1, 2008
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