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To find what is lost, we must lose ourselves. For it is only when we are lost that we can truly understand how to find someone.
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Submitted: Aug 24, 2008 Reads: 126 Comments: 36 Likes: 12
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Wow this is awesome!! very well written!!
Posted: Aug 24, 2008
Simple, realistic, gets right to the point. Loved it, can't say more.
Posted: Aug 24, 2008
i think you should create more nutrients, to many and , a,nothings, misunderstandings,am alls, it seems like salad, no nutrients, exept on the mediocer line at the end, but something tells me , you have the beasts inside you, and it comes out acasionally Lucien Remeese
Posted: Aug 24, 2008
I really enjoyed this poem, it is deep and powerful in your grafting of words. Excellent. ~X
Posted: Aug 25, 2008
very deep. very true. amazing. i loved it :]
Posted: Aug 26, 2008
wow. i havent been on here in forever.
this is truely beautiful the words you chose, however sparse, weave a complex picture
:)
good job kiddo.
:):)
Posted: Sep 2, 2008
bahahaha.
:)
honestly the construction is very good, your style has evolved alot.
Posted: Sep 5, 2008
I have no words! really very very good! excellent!
Posted: Sep 6, 2008
I didn't really get it, but i enjoyed it none the less.
Posted: Sep 8, 2008
Wow, that was cool. Good job!
Posted: Sep 9, 2008
once again beautiful
Posted: Sep 12, 2008
Wow, such a cool way of describing something lost and invisible. Great rhyming, a good beat and such powerful words. I really like mysterious poems like this one that make people guess and produce a different image according to their imaginations. I really liked this one, you're really great with words! =)
Posted: Sep 13, 2008
"lost in comprehension"
that my favorite line from this, loving it.
I like poems that keep short and hard hitting, unlike those ones that end up going up thier ass with overcomplicated stuff, you keep it simple and strong.
and no im not stalking you, Im posting all over the place tonight, nothing else to do.
Posted: Sep 16, 2008
be careful what you wish for heh heh heh.
(Creepy gin)
Posted: Sep 16, 2008
wow this is rather beautiful, full of talent i'd say hehe now you read a poem of mine and comment and i will do the same until i have nothing else of yours to read? hmmm?
Posted: Sep 16, 2008
You have so much talent in you...I love how you use lovely words in each poem...There just so awesome
Posted: Sep 16, 2008
wow, very deep. I love this one too. it's amazing, keep writeing. :)
Posted: Sep 18, 2008
Ah, that stare...
great poem.
By the by, Thanks for sharing the eecummings poem on your page. Lovely indeed!
I'm not sure that it is the same stare in mine, but I think that you might like to check out my latest poem: Judge Knot. You might like my other stuff as well; I too am all and/or nothing.
craaig
Posted: Sep 20, 2008
Wow! This is really well written. I love your choice of words.
Posted: Sep 24, 2008
impressive piece
i'm nothing, i am all
says it all
Posted: Sep 26, 2008
Nice read - I like the style
Posted: Sep 27, 2008
This is wonderful. I really like how it's kept simple but with so much hidden meaning to it.
Posted: Sep 29, 2008
Fantastic. Really creates mental imagery.
Posted: Oct 2, 2008
Very well expresses. It touches heart.
Posted: Oct 2, 2008
Ok, I really liked this because it was #1 interesting, and #2 though provoking. Many poems have the same theme or genre and this was different. Unique. That is something to be proud of.
Posted: Oct 3, 2008
wow i read some of ur poems n they were
great all r really well written
Posted: Oct 6, 2008
Ooh nicely written Itsuwari.
Keep it up!
Off to read more of your lovely work.
~October
Posted: Oct 15, 2008
Those last three lines are to die for... I mean you say our thoughts and feelings so well.
Few words cut.
craaig
Posted: Oct 17, 2008
I really love this poem i think tht it is one of the best tht ive read
Posted: Oct 19, 2008
Nice to be back and to be able to read your work again. I love this style and you do it so professionally, with flair and confidence but most of all - competently!
Posted: Oct 22, 2008
This is really nice, and although it's sad it has such a calming feel to it. the last line is brilliant. I always think the last line has to be good, and u've done it good!! x
Posted: Oct 23, 2008
'Ah... sweet mystery of life at last I've found thee!!'
**"To find what is lost, we must lose ourselves"**
Marvelously written. Peace.....Jerry
Posted: Oct 24, 2008
Reminds me of...beatnik and acid wash subtly lathered. This was a cool piece. Very nice.
Posted: Oct 31, 2008
wow......... this was an awesome poem! glad you told me to check out your work! i absolutely loved it!!
Posted: Nov 3, 2008
LOVE IT LOVE IT. -^_^-
Posted: Nov 5, 2008
aww how cute. True true.
Posted: Nov 6, 2008
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