Oh sweet goddess, open up thy heart and except my sacrifice.
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Submitted: Apr 18, 2008
Reads: 76
Comments: 7
Likes: 5
Of these shadows that haunt me
I can say only this
As I turn and I twist
In pain or joy
I know not which
As the sullen sands draw to an end
And life is left
To itself fend
And lush green fields decline once more
Into the light
These shadows pour
And calm dark dusk flows from the night
Giving way
To bare the night
And the goddess’ arms open to take
Away the pain
And our mistake
Of these shadows that haunt me
I can say only this
As I turn and twist
In fear or lust
I know not which
But of all of this
I find a way
To find a place
Where I can sit
So let these shades engulf me.
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Comments:
I could never Word anything with such flow.
Posted: Apr 19, 2008
It flowed very nicely. Great job. =D
Posted: May 3, 2008
i could never do something like this, its amazing that you can. I love all your poetry. you.. freakin rock >.< lol
Posted: Sep 18, 2008
With great poetic work like this..its hard for me to leave a comment lol.
Its like my words can't comprehend yours..or something like that.
I love this.
Thank you for sharing this.
Posted: Oct 3, 2008
This is nice, I really like the way it balanced. It was enjoyable to read.
Posted: Oct 3, 2008
This is really good…so dark yet so calm. A feeling with each rime, a touch of sadness in their words…yet it makes me *feel* the way I like feeling.
Posted: Oct 14, 2008
I felt an intensity when reading this. As I read further I felt it increase. Perhaps relating to the words. I like that it draws emotion! Very nice I thought.
Posted: Oct 19, 2008
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