Sancturary of Some Gods

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Poem By: Itsuwari
Poetry

Tags: god, religion, truth, sancturary

Another religious poem, yay. I am so very happy... please, god, shoot me.

Note: Sancturarium is a secluded haven. View table of contents...

Submitted: May 10, 2008 Reads: 59 Comments: 6 Likes: 3

What sanctuarium can hold
Within our souls the truth
Such truths that seem forever lost
When misconceived be proof

What faith can live without a host
What freedom without will
Who is to say if we can live
And who to say we kill

What men can worship faceless gods
Who slaughter without guilt
And what man can turn his back to god
When the hand of god he’s felt

What sancturarium can hold
Without our souls the truth
What truths that seem forever lost
Once misjudged by proof

Such sorrow lost without faith
Disappointment never known
But hope and justice seem to flee
With empty heart, a home

So it seems there is no answer
To questions left to god
Whether I be son and savior
Or heretic and fraud

What sancturarium can hold
Without our souls these truths
Such truths that seem forever lost
Once led unto the noose.

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Comments:

Aislin Kane

Oh, that was very powerful. I loved the rhythm that just seemed to roll off the tongue. Great job!

Posted: May 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much, always love a good comment.

Ichi Clairvoyance

I liked the delicate pattern in which you have displayed your words. This is a powerful poem, and I love the mood that you set with your words.

Posted: Jun 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much, I am glad you like it, the pattern especially.

so64

Very deep and interesting.

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Not deep at all, but I agree that it's interesting. Thank you.

TheWarrior

Very powerful. Love the way the words just fit together. The rhyming was blatant, but felt subtle. Great effect. Maybe needs a little more body and depth, but overall a very engaging poem.

Posted: Jul 6, 2008

Author Comment:

TheWarrior

Very powerful. Love the way the words just fit together. The rhyming was blatant, but felt subtle. Great effect. Maybe needs a little more body and depth, but overall a very engaging poem.

Posted: Jul 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, always open to a little constructive criticism, in fact it is quite refreshing now and again. Thank you, I am overly joyed at your response.