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-Suicide-

Poem By: Itsuwari
Poetry


Tags: poetry, suicide, life

First in the series, "Suicide." This series incorperates a few different points of view. The series is mainly and foremost a personification of Suicide. This isn't the best piece in the series, but being the first it is rather important. If you like this one, or even if you don't, I suggest you read the rest of them. I hope you enjoy. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Dec 26, 2007    Reads: 113    Comments: 27    Likes: 11   


You smirk and laugh
As you make them bleed
You are a demon
So evil indeed

You sit and watch
As they give up and crie
You never offer a hand
As they lay down and die,

You visit them
In times of doubt
You speak of comfort
And offer a way out,

Such blasphemous lies
You sing ever so sweet
You twist there doubt
And lay them to sleep,

They may hold the blade
But you make the kill
Blind to there suffering
Boy, what a thrill,

You make them bleed
You make them die
You make them give up
But not I, suicide.


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Comments:

Interesting focus upon corruption and a detached lack of compassion.

Posted: Jan 19, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm glad you thought so.

yes very interesting and intensly written with obvious passion and uniqness good write...

Posted: Jan 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, I'm glad you found it so.

Lots of thought penertated into this poem great write.....Juliet

Posted: Jan 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you.

good. i particuarly liked the quickening as the end approaches.

Posted: Jan 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you.

ahhh, i love this.
Its a very true point yet strong poem. Intense.
I loved it!

---Kcy:)

Posted: Jan 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, it's been a whils since I heard from you, I love your comments. Thanks again.

Dang, that's so true. Sounds like you have a perspective on this issue that not everyone is unfortunate enough to understand. Man. Good stuff.

Posted: Jan 31, 2008

Author Comment:

Define unfortunate. Thank you for the comment, I appreciate it.

wow i can easily say i like this poem the best so far out of like the 100 ive read!!!!!!! i guess its casue i feel the same way recently one of my colsest friends took her own like and you poem just hits home i guess grea going 1000% 10 /10 and an i like it

Posted: Feb 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow, thank you. I am sorry for your loss, and can honestly say I know what it feels like to loose a loved one to suicide. Thank you for the comment.

wow, its completely amazing.
love
princess cosmos
xxx

Posted: Feb 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much.

This is am amazing poem. I deal with this kind of stuff almost everyday, but mainly my own thoughts in the area. But wow, great poem

Posted: Feb 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you.

wow very good!

Posted: Feb 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much.

omigosh. i absolutely love it. i know i haven't read any of your poems lately, but i'm glad i decided to. great poem.
peace out___Lydia___

Posted: Feb 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you.

omigosh. i absolutely love it. i know i haven't read any of your poems lately, but i'm glad i decided to. great poem.
peace out___Lydia___

Posted: Feb 5, 2008

Author Comment:


Very Intense! loved it!

Posted: Feb 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you.

Great poem! Very well written. Would like to see more of this series.

Anne

Posted: Feb 21, 2008

Author Comment:

I am posting IX and X in just a short while, the rest are kinda strewn throughout my poetry list, sorry. Thank you very much for the comment.

I am interested at your use of personification on this topic, but I'm not surprised. :) It is a very interesting take on the subject. I like the poem itself and the message is quite simple.

Posted: Jun 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Everything is simple love. Haven't we already covered this? Ah, but it doesn't matter. There is more to the series if you care to read it, but this is by far the best, and it says pretty much everything the others do, they just say from a different point of veiw.

Awsome. I loved it. Can you teach me how to write good poems?

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

Author Comment:

If you can read poetry, you can write poetry. Read "Poetry Rules"

horrible

Posted: Aug 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow, thank you for that in depth analysis, Lucien.

hey, I love this poem. It hits the spot for me... Ironically my second cousin just shot himself in the head last night over a girl. I always say don't fret over someone that isn't fretting over you. This is an amazing poem. All your poems are amazing. They flow, they have such deep emotion, and they are from your HEART. I love it! Thankyou for writing and posting all your writings, including this one!

Posted: Sep 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow, thank you for the incredible comment. I'm overlyjoyed that you enjoyed it. This piece means a lot to me to, as do the others of this series. Each for a different friend. Thank you again, sorry for your loss.

wow, very intense, and oh so evil!

Posted: Sep 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Not evil at all, not for me anyway. But if that is how you view it, then it is your own. I'm glad you liked them.

yeah i knows its not evil, i just wanted to say that, very intense though, bloody good work.

Posted: Sep 16, 2008

Author Comment:

=^.^= Yay blood.

Sounds similar to one of my poems. Wonderful work.^^

Posted: Sep 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you =^.^= Read the others if you have the time. They are rather hard to find unfortunately... Again, thank you.

ok i like this, its like you confronted an inner demon there...

Posted: Oct 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Yeah... something like that. Thank you for the comment.

sweet

Posted: Oct 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Uhh... alright then.

really good poem full of deep meaning and metaphors. It was a really good read. nice work :)

Posted: Oct 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much, I truly appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on one of my pieces. =^.^=

They may hold the blade
But you make the kill
Blind to there suffering
Boy, what a thrill,

this was my favourite bit. I love how you've seperated depression from the human, making it appear like it's not a persons choice to comit suicide or even contemplate doing so. Very true. alot of people will no doubt be able to relate to this xx

Posted: Oct 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Too many, actually, but thank you. =^.^=

...................................... wow sorry bout all the dots i had nothing to say. it's really really good.

Posted: Nov 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you.



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