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Submitted: Dec 31, 2007 Reads: 107 Comments: 19 Likes: 12
To live, to die
To love, to hate
To feel, too numb
Masquerade
Believing I am sane
Giving reality a little break
Pretend that I am whole
Too far, to walk
To see, to hear
To know, too blind
Lovingly
I fall to you forever
But we know this truth
And what lies lie beyond it
Too sane, to quit
Too deaf, too sick
To be, to cease to exist
To be
We must cease to exist
To cease
We must be
We must be
We must be
We are.
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i like it it's a little mysterious but thats what i really like about it. very very good. i love your poetry. write more soon. i can't.=[
peace out.____xxemoxbfsxx____
Posted: Dec 31, 2007
Hey Hi Itsuwari! :) I,like it but I think if you gave it a different structure, like centering it and changing some of the capitalizing so it is certain which line runs into the next or not. do you know what I mean? best wishes; Happy New Years....katie
Posted: Jan 1, 2008
I raelly love the structure of this poem. Graet work. I'm working on new posts right now. Do you think i should get off the love subject? I'm really not sure what to do anymore..
---Kcy:]
Posted: Jan 1, 2008
Wow...I like it! And, as usual, I love how your description is a guide to reading it. Because you said "open to interpretation," I tried to think of what theme would fit with your words. I interpreted it as a poem about God (surprising I know lol). "I fall to you forever"...I have this mental picture of someone falling on their knees in front of Jesus. Then at the end, when you say "We must cease to exist," it makes sense. When we find Christ, WE are ceasing to exist because we are losing ourselves (and simultaneously finding ourselves) in Him. I also love the way you repeated "We must be" three times. I reminds me of a song, like you're fading out the music.
Keep up the amazing work!
-Abby
Posted: Jan 2, 2008
Hey, this is an awesome poem! I love the way it flows, every word falling of the tip of the tongue. I shall read all your work given the chance :) ~ Nixie
Posted: Jan 2, 2008
i like your poetry, i agree with xxemoxbfsxx a little dark and mysterious, but i like it, nice. I also like how you leave it to the reader to determine, thats how i write my stuff too, the ending is up to the reader to decide.
Posted: Jan 4, 2008
Change nothing. Let others change. Good poem.
Posted: Jan 4, 2008
i must say, i really like this. to me, it has multiple meanings and it really got me wondering and thinking. you write very well =)
Posted: Jan 5, 2008
you got it going on here. i really like the way it shifts back and forth and yet seems to mean the same thing at the same time And the opposite if you will oblige me this meandering,but i do believe YOU understand what I'm saying. nontheless it is very,very provokotive and that's what i like in a piece.
Posted: Jan 5, 2008
I love your use of too and to - very well done - A very thought provoking poem...
Posted: Jan 5, 2008
Wow, this is really good. :]
Posted: Jan 6, 2008
I loved the cadence on the piece, it seemed steady, and didn't lose emotion either. I liked it kudos!
Posted: Jan 7, 2008
Nice flowing. Keep the gd work going! =3
Posted: Jan 29, 2008
Anything I say now will be redundant, so I'll leave it at that I like it. :)
Posted: Jun 1, 2008
It was fine!, a little bit different, sounded like a lyric of a song. But I liked, specially the ending "We are", it was unexpected.
Posted: Aug 6, 2008
jej =) I know it, maybe I expressed wrong. I meant that the statement "we are", just at the end of the poem was not expected -at least for me. It had a flow that you could think whatever, it was so open to think and then at the end the poem "falls" in a "we are", closing the poem, not expected - for me. You did a good performance.
Posted: Aug 7, 2008
I really enjoyed this poem, as you said 'open to interpretation' it was definetley a poem that made me think, that's what i love about it.
Well Done!
Posted: Oct 7, 2008
To live, to die
To love, to hate
To feel, too numb
Masquerade
Believing I am sane
Giving reality a little break
Fave part =D
I really liked this poem
Great Job!
Posted: Oct 14, 2008
It absolutely made me think. It took me to considering stages in life an emotion. Somehow the end spoke to me expressing...at the end of it all 'we are'. I felt like it was speaking to the human nature to fight the inevitable. Not necessarily death but constantly trying to determine ones path as we go through living and changing ...
At any rate. It clearly makes your mind roll and that's what makes it great!
Posted: Oct 19, 2008
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