Random First Lines: On The Water  In utter stillnessWater like glass shows in perfect clarityevery cloud above and... : Poetry » Read

Welcome Visitor: Login to the siteJoin the site

AT 12:00 MIDNIGHT

Poem By: jadey oneil
Poetry


I did have nightmares before. There wasn't any single night I slept comfortably in my rented room.There was one time I was almost drowned in deep slumber. I was so afraid it would happen again. I'd always think that nightmare wasn't an easy or painless death for anyone. Years after that, I did have a nightmare again when I stayed at my brother's home. It happened only once but it was the kind which I feared a lot. I thought I could not make it but I did. I prayed in my sleep and I found it amazing to get to know who was the person being sent over to save me. It was my Father. My Father has never failed me. He was home and he was so far away but he came in my sleep to wake me up. I'm glad they don't bother me that much again.
View table of contents...

 

Submitted: May 27, 2008    Reads: 74    Comments: 21    Likes: 9   


I woke up in the middle of night;

Hair disheveled, eyes opened wide;

Out of nowhere, the appearance ofmy knight;

Fear vanished, finding place to hide.

* * *

Sitting up from bed still shocked;

This darkness resembled and replayed a scene;

I cursed my thoughts for wandering back;

From a place I hardly called a dream.

* * *

All alone in my own tranquil room;

The nocturnal foe paid me a visit;

Ruthlessly announcedmy forthcoming doom;

My heartbeat waned bit by bit.

* * *

So afraid what my unwelcome guest came in for;

This midnight phantom’s out for a kill;

Shivering, I headed out the door;

But I found my body lying still!

* * *

This black faceless shadow, darker than night,

Made my own chamber a dungeon;

Sleepy head couldn’t come into the light;

Uncoordinated senses of mine, stubborn as stallion!

* * *

Wake up! Get up from slumber!

Oh, how my frightened soul cried out;

I felt like being swallowed up by deadly air;

Did someone really come before I passed out?


9

Email this story Email this story | Print Story Print Story | Add to reading list

Comments:

wow, now that is creepy! All this talk of ghosts (Nixie's story) and now your dreams has me turning on more lights in my house. Is that true? Did you really feel like you were leaving your body behind? Craziness.

Posted: May 27, 2008

Author Comment:

It's scary but it's true. I did even refuse to sleep when it was still happening almost every night. The one which I feared the most was when someone invited me to come with them. I almost did but the door was shut closed before I could get out. But that was still in the dream. I'm glad it doesn't happen now or if it does, it's not as bad as those I had.

tranquil room

I know how u feel when ur room turns foe....

Don't worry this happens to all creative people ....

Don't worry, say a silent prayer and turn over, drink a cool glass of water, make the room cool , switch on bed lights and sleep tight....
Nothing will happen....to those whom GOD takes care of...

Posted: May 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Such comforting words...:-) You sounded like my Father and I love that. Thanks, Pratibha! :-)

this was really good. Great job!
I love it. It had my attention all the way through. lol
very interesting piece!
cant wait to read more.
~mandy

Posted: May 27, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm glad you loved it. Thanks for commenting. :-)

jadey oneil:

Well written and nicely expressed feelings of relief and gratitude. Gave it an "I Like It" vote.

When you get the chance, please read my new posting "Excitement Inspired In His/Her Time." Provides a parent's perspective.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Posted: May 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Relief and Gratitude...You just provided me the right terms! Thanks for that very heartwarming vote. I'll read and comment on your work. :-)

This was so expressive and I certainly identify with the horrors of bad dreams. You did a wonderful job expressing yourself through it.

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

I'd hardly call it a dream. It was a very bad nightmare. I thank God it doesn't bother me again. I pray that it WON'T. Thanks for sharing your thoughts, Susan! ;-)

Did someone really come before I passed out?

**VERY creepy...***

a great piece...

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh, Thanks! :-)

deep poem, great use of words in this. you got my vote.

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Your comment means a lot. Thanks! :-)

Creepy!! I really like the tone of this poem. Your words conjure up a very eerie feeling and it makes me want to lock the doors and turn on the lights when I'm home alone lol. The part about the faceless shadow gave me the chills, seriously. Excellent poem, Jadey!

Stephanee :)

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

I scared you a bit, I guess. But only kids believe in it. I was wrong. LOL! Thanks, Stephanee. :-)

oh no. great job. take care.
Lydia_xxxx

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!

Wow makes you think doesn't it!!! im glad that your prayers were answered!!! OMG A PLUS!!!

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

I was thankful they were. :-)
Thanks, Wandiola!

wow, really intense...just how I like em':P Every word painted a picture in my mind. I really enjoyed reading this! great job!
steph(:

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Glad you enjoyed it, Steph. Thanks! :-)

Wow, the cross between creepy and startling. This was a very well written poem! You really did well with imagery especially in the first few stanzas, and with the last stanza also. I know how you feel about nightmares. But usually I have them all the time. It is kind of a scary thing, and that your always afraid to go to sleep because if they come back. It can be a frightening though. This poem was one of the best well written I've seen before. The message was good, and the rhyme scheme...just spectacular! You really didn't push any words or anything, it was fabulous. Great work! :D

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

You still have them? Oh, that's pretty much scary. When I had the nightmare, I couldn't just get up, let alone move. Or, when I got the chance to open my eyes, that would only take a moment then I was back to sleep again. It felt like I was very sleepy and something was like taking me back to a deep slumber. I don't want to experience that again. Frightening!

When I wrote that, there were a lot of emotions playing on in me but I wasn't sure if they were skillfully addressed to. But your comment wakened up a sense of confidence in me. Thank you! :-)

Wow, a strong poem! I have a lot of freaky dreams and I can relate to the emotions this demonstrates. It is creepy, which fits - it's perfect! ~ Nixie

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

You made me smile, Nixie. Thank you! :-)

This one had me thinking for sure! I love how original this was and the way it got the blood pumping. Nice job!

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

I think it's a bit different if it comes from experience, which people rarely encounter. I dunno but I guess, that's what made it somewhat original. Thanks, Lacey! :-)

Great poem! I like it! Creepy and cool....I know people like that. LOL

Anyways great poem, I likt it!

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Glad you liked it, Matt.
Thanks!

Loved it....had loads of nightmares when I was a kid...still have some once in a while....creepy anf un read!

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Glad you liked it, Deb! Thanks!:-)

I have nightmares all the time, but I never remember what was so scary. I just wake up very frightened and I don't even know where I am in my own room.

Great job. Scary, but it pulls at the heartstrings.
~Kaori

Posted: May 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Perhaps, you forgot about them when you woke up. It does happen sometimes. The scariest ones are those that linger in your thoughts and keep you frightened all the time. That's how mine was. Thanks, Kaori!:-)

jadey a really creepy one. nightmare are worst because we have no control over them, glad you have a saviour.
great poem. snow x

Posted: May 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Having a saviour around is a great relief. Thanks for the comnment, Snowbelle!;-)

this is really great! good job!!

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! :-)

This was really beautiful poem.It's a bit sad.Its not very nice when a person have nightmares.I know how is that...I had nightmares too before.Every night.I cryed whole night from fear.Those dreams were so scary,and always the same...But very great poem. :)

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Nightmares scare us as always. Thanks! ^^

scary nightmares! i hate it when i try not to think about it, but i do anyways...........this is really good! and captures what a nightmare really is!
~Lemon

Posted: Jul 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Nightmares are always scary. They're always man's worst enemies. Thanks for commenting, Alex. ^^



Add Your Comments:

Your Name:

Spam protection control::

© Copyright 2008 jadey oneil All rights reserved. jadey oneil has granted theNextBigWriter, LLC non-exclusive rights to display this work on Booksie.com.

Add to Reading List
Become a fan
Email this story Email this story
Read/Write Reviews Read/Write Reviews
Print Story Print Story



Other writing by jadey oneil S I L H O U E T T E WINDOWS OF MY HEART HIS MAJESTY THE UNWELCOME VISITOR MIDNIGHT PHANTOM More..



Tags

Love, Poetry, Death, Life, Poem, Romance, Pain, Fantasy, Hope, Sad, Sex, Hate, God, Horror, War, Humor, Hurt, Sadness, Loss, Dark, Fiction, Depression, Heart, Family, Friendship.

About | News | Contact | Your Account | TheNextBigWriter | Advertise

© 2008 TheNextBigWriter, LLC. All Rights Reserved. Terms under which this service is provided to you. Privacy Policy.