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THE UNWELCOME VISITOR

Poem By: jadey oneil
Poetry


Parts of the country were badly hit by the typhoon FRANK (international code name: Fengshen). Such unfortunate event brought so much loss - lives, homes, living. But this piece isn't just about typhoon Frank. This talks about typhoon in general and what it does during the duration of its stay.^^ View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 27, 2008    Reads: 74    Comments: 14    Likes: 8   


Neither a friend nor an enemy;

He barged in unwelcome;

Buzzing and whistling around,

Trees bent down in fear;

He knocked on each door;

Pounded hard on every window;

Seeking entrance to every home.

But nobody wanted him in!

Rustling up anything along the way,

As if giving up for further attempts,

He went away, far away calmly…softly…

The feel of him was barely felt,

He’s gone…momentarily.

* * *

Then Suddenly,

Out of nowhere he showed up;

Like a game of hide and seek,

He came searching…chasing…man hunting…

Letting anyone feel his visit…his presence!

Hard blows were set free!

Everything else around was flying elsewhere---

People went hiding,

Finding safety in every corner of their dwelling;

Children trembling in great fear

Without a full understanding who could be that foe.

Shrill cries were everywhere---

A call for help when everyone else around were helpless;

He was enjoying the game.

* * *

Outside every home,

He still was enraged!

Dissatisfied with the sight of wreck,

He thought of a much thrilling scene;

Something that he’d enjoy watching;

Then his laughter whirred on air!

Friends were being called---

The lightning appeared!

The thunder roared!

Then the heavy rain came rushing in!

They played the game of power;

Taking charge of everything in sight;

The world was all theirs;

Then the whips of cruelty began.

* * *

Then there came their idea of fun…

Joining together in strength, they struck!

Sweeping jerry-built shanties off;

Destroying properties and assets;

Taking away sources of livelihood;

Until those shelters were successfully invaded;

Until he heard the sound of people’s defeat.

Yet, his tyranny didn’t end there…

He sailed through the sea;

Tempted the ocean to wash anything, anyone ashore;

And it did without a bit of compassion!

Innocent lives struggled for safety…

Unmindful of their fear, of their loss…

But they didn’t prosper that much.

He took hundreds of lives in an instant!

* * *

Like all others that passed by…

He made a history of his own…

He was to be feared…

He was to be remembered…

He was cruel than death…

He was the unwelcome visitor!


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Comments:

oh wow, this is so good!! you portrayed it so well! i'm very impressed! great job!

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

Author Comment:

We're just hit by one so it really must be effective. Thanks for commenting. ^^

Wow this was powerful it explained anything and everything a typhoon can do. I really like this, keep up the good work, seriously. =]

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Glad you liked it, Steph!
Thanks! ^^

O_O

oh my gosh jadey - this is incredible! i hope the typhoon didnt cause any harm for you and your family. i hope everyone is okay... but gosh, thats just scary stuff.
a great poem - and it was packed with the emotion. i loved it
keep up the great writing ^^

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

Author Comment:

My family back home is alright. My hometown wasn't in Frank's list. Thank God. But, I wasn't saved. I witnessed and felt him hovering outside my room. Nonetheless, he didn't caught me. Again, I thank God for that. Too bad others were badly hurt, some even lost their lives...:-(

Thanks for commenting. ^^

great piece..yet i can't stop thinking of the victims of the typhoon especially to those who lost their loved ones when the Princess of the Stars sank..
Let's offer our prayers to them...

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

Author Comment:

I can't get them out of my mind too. The thought of typhoon really terrifies me. Imagine how it takes LIVES that instant. Those pips had been through a lot of difficulties in life---struggling a lot---only to be met with such a cruel end. Who would have thought death was waiting amidst the ocean? And the children, oh God, they're too young...:-(

Thanks for the comment, my friend. ^^

this is very good. i liked how you described what he did so vividly!!!!!1 great job!
~Lemon

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

Author Comment:

I just became his witness, that's why. Thanks, Lemon! ^^

Oh boy, Jadey. This is an awesome piece, and yet incredibly sad. Have never witnessed a typhoon before but the picture this created was pretty scary. I hope that all that went through this get out of this ok. A lovely and informative read.

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Unfortunately, when typhoon Frank showered us with his blows, people were badly injured and worst, died without a fair fight. So sad...:-(

Perhaps, nature could really be our worst enemy.

Thanks for commenting, Deb! ^^

Woow!This was excellent!!I love it.Great written.WOW,that's all I can say...GREAT GREAT GREAT!I like it alooot.Really awesome work,and poem,I dont have words. :)

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

Author Comment:

You don't have to say more. Saying wow twice and great thrice is more than enough. Thanks! ^^

Great job capturing this. Only experience earthquakes from time to time, never experienced just what that unwelcome visitor is like.

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

Author Comment:

You wouldn't want him in your home...
You wouldn't want him near your loved ones...
You wouldn't want him around...
You would want him gone...forever.

His cruelty could make you wish thinks like that.

Thanks for commenting. ^^

Wow, I really liked this! Great idea to make the typhoon a personality and show things from his perspective. I grew up in florida, so I know all about hurricanes and destruction. We were never hit by one, thank God, but the threat was always there and we had to evacuate a couple of times. You captured the fear and helplessness of such a storm vividly. I think this may be my favorite of yours. ~Em

Posted: Jun 29, 2008

Author Comment:

I took typhoon into a different persona--someone who's brutal. This way, the reader could vividly picture out the image of a sadist. I just thought it was effective. I think it worked.

I heard about Hurricane Wilma which hit Florida but it was Hurricane Katrina (New Orleans) which I've really remembered most. Perhaps, it was the worst one.

Thanks for commenting, Em! ^^

You wrote so accurately, Jadey. It was a great poem, and so true!

Posted: Jun 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Again, I thank you for being thoughtful, Susan. Pisceanmood and I were deeply touched how much you cared when you heard about it. Godbless! ^^

Thanks for commenting! ^^

You never fail to impress and inspire me! I loved it! ~ nixie

Posted: Jun 30, 2008

Author Comment:

You really know how to build confidence in me. I thank you, Nix! ^^

I'm loving the personification. IT's great, got some real emotion in there. I've never experienced a hurricane or anything so this is really good from my point of view.
~Kaori

Posted: Jun 30, 2008

Author Comment:

oh, Thanks Kaori for coming back. ^^

such a terrible thing and experience for those who live in constant fear of threat of this 'unwelcome visitor.."...so sad....in a fraction of a second, evrything is over....
powerful emotions because YOU have written from heart....and the fear of that experience....

Posted: Jun 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Nature could be man's worst enemy. It feels helpless once it strikes us. Terrible! You're always right when you talked about reaching out to our loved one. We just can't tell how long we could be with each other. ^^ Thanks, buddy! ^^

oohhhh, that sent shivers down my spine as i read it! It makes you think of a presence that you think is their but it isn't. Really good! :) If you have a mo, please read some of mine, thank you and well done again!

Posted: Nov 7, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm glad that it gave that kind of effect on you. Thanks for the comment! ^^



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