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Submitted: Jan 22, 2008 Reads: 45 Comments: 10 Likes: 4
An Ocean of Wind
Trees bend and flow
like seagrass;
long green tresses
waving
in an ocean of wind.
Swallows,
like small fishes,
dart
the gusting unseen tide,
and ride
the swirling eddies there,
feasting
on the insect plankton
of the air.
In this tidal rip
of leaves
the swinging branches
form
a wondrous canopy
of shade,
a dappled veranda
under which to walk,
hand in hand,
to swim this breeze along.
James Gagiikwe © 2008
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Beautifully composed and realized. Please check out my stuff.
Posted: Jan 22, 2008
Got that feel from the poem - nice.
Posted: Jan 22, 2008
Great imagery as usual, James. It reads easily with a lovely flow, comparing swallows and fish, insect and plankton, etc. A delightful read.....Jerry
Posted: Jan 22, 2008
Wonderful! I could actaully feel the true sting of your poem!
Posted: Jan 22, 2008
James a really great peice of poetry....Could see it in ones mind......Take care juliet
Posted: Jan 22, 2008
You Portrayed a very special place :) as Juliet says: you can see it all in the minds eye :) Thank You once again James Gagiikwe (smile)
Posted: Jan 22, 2008
That was good. i liked it. the sea is really an underground sky.
Posted: Jan 22, 2008
very good. i liked it. Read my poems.
Posted: Jan 23, 2008
Just read this again, it is very effective.
Posted: Jan 23, 2008
James,
I like the imaginative idea..lends a magical air.
Particularly like the phrase 'insect plankton'
Worth my rating.
Ricky
Posted: Jan 23, 2008
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