Ode to a Jerk, a poem by Jason George

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Poem By: Jason George
Poetry

Tags: ode, jerk, love, hate, failed, relationships, split, breakup, jason, george

Dedicated to Z.C., the subject of my anger. View table of contents...

Submitted: Jul 20, 2008 Reads: 63 Comments: 5 Likes: 1

You met her

You were captivated

You asked her out

You were glad when she said yes

You were a great guy

<3<3<3<3<3

You were a little protective

You slowly pushed her friends away

You were disliked a little

You still made her happy

<3<3<3<3<3

You seducted her

You got her pregnant

You were both scared at first

You accepted it nonetheless

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You discovered a guy in love with her

You harrassed him

You made him hate you

You made him love her more

<3<3<3<3<3

You supported her as she dropped school

You held her hand as she gave birth

You asked her to marry you

You were both overjoyed at her answer

You were a happy family

<3<3<3<3<3

You discovered him keeping in contact with her

You were irritated

You became violent

You lowered her self esteem

You became a jerk

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You began hitting and pushing

You made her pull away

You caused the split

You should feel terrible

H8H8H8H8H8

You big jerk

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Comments:

i really liked how the hearts turned to broken hearts at the end. that was really creative ^^
just wanted to first say that
secondly
i liked this. not your best - but not everything can be. this was more venting poetry. i know the story behind it, so i understand it all perfectly lol but yeah.
this was decent. i look forward to the next poetry chapter in this story that you said you'd probably write about.

i hope this guy (wont say his name b/c i figured u wanted to keep his name on the downlow since u just put initials) learns a lesson from this. some times u gotta learn the hard way.

looking forward to your next post :)

Posted: Jul 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks... I know it's not my best, but really I was in the mood to write when my friend told me about them breaking up. I was angry, so I decided to write about what I felt... Thanks for keeping him censored, I wasn't sure whether or not it would matter because I use their names in my next poem. I won't use their last names, I guess... Thanks for the kindness, Alice. :)

Maple Bowen

Love it! I always find myself writing when I'm angry, and I find that my writing is a lot better! Keep up the good work, love to read more of your writing! =)
~Maple

Posted: Jul 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks... Yeah, venting helps the writing process, in my opinion, but that's just me. Thanks! :)

jessie wal

this was really good, it sort of played like a video in my head and that doesn't happen often with poems so...fab!

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Aw, well, thanks, Jessie. :)

Olola

Wow! That was really good, I love how you used the progressing hearts and the 'H8' to sort of animate what was happening. The poem was straight forward and easy to follow.

Keep up the good work!

Olola.

Posted: Jul 23, 2008