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melancholy mood

Poem By: jmevee
Poetry


The pain of love unfulfilled... View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 19, 2008    Reads: 62    Comments: 4    Likes: 2   


thoughts and dreams of what could be

crash and thrash inside of me

an endless stream of hopes and needs

a restless gardener sowing seeds

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a path that once did seem so clear

threatens now to disappear

like water flowing through my hands

I lose my sight of promised lands

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a sorrow fills my very soul

where once my heart, is but a hole

I walk alone into the dark

I've lost my drive, my life, my spark

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I'm losing my grip on reality

shifting, drifting away from me

slipping further day by day

maybe, in time, I'll fade away


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Comments:

you are really good at poetry, with the flow and rhythm and your words are all perfectly chosen for the right moment..... i loved this, i can really relate to that mood

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Glad you like it. Sometimes the poems just seem to write themselves...

I love the flow and the rhythm your poetry has and of course the emotions that get through the words. A wonderful peace.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you. You've got it when you say rhythm - I read each stanza aloud to a beat (tapping the desk). It really helps to capture the flow. Glad you like it.

Oh my word I JUST LOVE this poem, yes I agree,
it flows wonderfully and to me the way you put it all together it just had me right there...... in that poem.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Author Comment:

I aim to please...if I can draw someone into my poems then I have definitely achieved something.

Thanks for your comment.

lyk it- rilly lyk it- rilly rilly like it! Oops, understatement, I jus luhvv it!!! kip up da good work

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for your comment.



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